Firefly ficlet: Dark (River, Jayne)

[cynthia_arrow]

Title: Dark

Comments

[eponine119]

I like this. I'm not entirely sure if the style works for River, either, but I like it and it works for me. If that makes any sense. River seems like she would be an impossible character to even try to write, and you do a fantastic job here.

[cynthia_arrow]

I'm really not sure if you can tell a coherent narrative from River's perspective. I thought something fragmentary would work better, but this probably isn't fragmentary enough. It makes too much sense. :)

Thanks for the feedback. It makes sense to me--and it's probably the same reaction I had to the writing of it. :)

[alissabobissa]

I thinks this works as River's voice just fine. I'm shuddering just thinking about having to write her voice, so yay for you on actually doing it. :)

Coincidentally, I caught Serenity this morning on TV. Now I have a craving for Firefly. I miss Mal and the gang.

[cynthia_arrow]

Thanks for the feedback. You're a generous person. ;)

Yeah, it was harder than I anticipated it being. Writing about her is one thing; writing from inside her head is entirely another.

[cypriangadigan]

Ah, well that was lovely.

[cynthia_arrow]

Thanks for reading. :)

[demonqueen666]

I don't know if it's exactly River, but it's very disjointed, which is definitely like her, at the very least. Um. If that makes any sense.

...for what it's worth, I liked it.

[cynthia_arrow]

Greeting from two weeks after you left this comment. *snorts* Sorry.

Anyway, I meant to say thanks for your feedback an this experiment. It doesn't feel like River to me exactly, either (or to other ^). But it's good to hear it's entertaining anyway. ;)