[Fic] "Good Girls Don't" (Ed/girl!Hei, NC-17)

[cryogenia]

Title: Good Girls Don't
Author: cryogenia
Pairing: Girl!Hei/Ed
Rating: NC-17 all the way
A/N: Sequel to Alter Ego, although I think it can mostly stand on its own :) Also, yeah...this was supposed to be a drabble? But the problem with me writing things out on notebook paper is that I quickly get tl;dr. This little monster was um, three sheets of paper O.

Comments

[truly_wished]

Aww, they're so cute, trying to get it right. Silly Alfons, she's an awesome girl, even if she isn't very good. *L*

[cryogenia]

XDD Yeah, they're trying...it's just hard.

[deathspie]

This made me giggle. xP

Alfons you bad girl, you.

...and I just noticed the word 'rubbers' is hilarious.

[cryogenia]

The word rubbers is second only to 'trousers' for being hilarious in my book, actually :)

[deathspie]

Preliminaries, babies, and puddle are funny words, too.

I mean, just say puddle really fast, over and over again.

"PuddlePuddlePuddlePuddlePuddlePuddle!"

"...Alfons, what the hell are you doing?"

-moron-

[kuchenhexe]

I normally don't care for genderswap. But I read "Alter Ego" back when you posted it, and recalled thinking it was a good, strong, believeable premise. I think the thing here is that it kept Alfons as Alfons, it just gave "him" an extra secret.

But anyway.

Oh, Cryo. This is marvelously, deliciously, wickedly hot. I really, really liked the view from girl!Alfons's eyes here, and the thought process, and the whole "good girls don't" theme throughout it, and the comparisons and contrasts and characterization and the realism of everything. Lovely job, this.

[cryogenia]

Thank you! I am flattered that you like it. I kind of like poor crossdressing alter!Winry and how utterly screwed she is in a lot of ways. I never thought I'd write this again, but then I remembered she is fun to play with :)

[nomdeplume13]

Like that she might not be good at being a girl, or be a good girl, but she manages to get Ed hot and bothered. So funny that he only comes up to her chest, and loves it all the same. And she embarrasses him easily, which is nice and in character. (he freaked with Psiren in the anime when he came in contact with her chest)

[cryogenia]

Thanks! Yeah, Ed's response to Psiren guides a lot of this :)

[militsa]

[cryogenia]

<3 Thanks...yeah, upon further reflection, I'm more satisfied that this can stand on its own.