Comments | cryogenia: [Fic] "A Lifetime" (Hei/Ed, R)

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[Fic] "A Lifetime" (Hei/Ed, R)

Feb 01, 2007 09:23

Title: A Lifetime
Author: cryogenia
Pairing: Ed+Al, implied past Hei/Ed
Rating: R
Genre: Some Chickens
A/N: This is one of the most personal things I have ever written. And I still don't know if the words really came out right, or if this says exactly what I feel about it. But I tried. And I'm proud of it.

( It is not like a pond, it is not like a lake, it is bigger than any of them, and salt stings at his cheeks and not all of it is from the air. )

7stages, songfic, r, fanfic, hyde, elric brothers, hei/ed

Comments 87

conch_fritter February 1 2007, 19:34:47 UTC

You touched a heartstring with this one. Beautiful, painful, and very close. Thanks for sharing, as always.

cryogenia February 1 2007, 20:55:19 UTC

Thanks, glad to know it moved :)

trixxykitty February 1 2007, 19:36:14 UTC

oooo that was very pretty ^.^

cryogenia February 1 2007, 20:55:46 UTC

Thank you :)

fallia February 1 2007, 19:44:03 UTC

I'll admit it. I cried at this. Every time I try to read it again it is making me cry. I have never cried at a fic before, ever, but this one did it. I know this is very close to you and I know it means a lot to you. Maybe that has something to do with the way it affected me.

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He loses his virginity in stages, in sudden fits and starts, and Alfons just offers himself up

Offers himself up

It is not like a pond, it is not like a lake, it is bigger than any of them, and salt stings at his cheeks and not all of it is from the air.
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This is just gorgeous.

Crap, I'm tearing up again, just writing this review. The sparse style you used with this makes it feel so elusive, and omfg I just love what you did with it.

I can't even talk about it, it's just too much.

Thanks for sharing this, Cryo. You should be proud of it. <3333 It's beautiful.

cryogenia February 1 2007, 20:56:36 UTC

<3 Coming from a writer whose Hei/Ed I really respect, this makes me very happy ;_;

hieronymousb February 1 2007, 19:47:24 UTC

I really like this style. It's not the sort of thing I'd advocate trying to use in every fic, but for this one, it certainly works. Creates a nice, ethereal feel. Such a sad story. Very touching. I think you did a wonderful job with this one. I hope to see more "from the heart" writing from you, now that you're feeling more okay with that sort of thing.

cryogenia February 1 2007, 20:57:43 UTC

XD Well, at the rate I wrote this one, it'll take another six months to get more "from the heart" writing? :F Some chickens?

...I need a "some chickens" icon.

fallia February 1 2007, 21:03:16 UTC

I need one, too XD

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cryogenia February 1 2007, 20:58:44 UTC

Thank you :)