Comments | cruiscin_lan: FIC: Defying Metaphor

cruiscin_lan

FIC: Defying Metaphor

Apr 17, 2009 18:01

Title: Defying Metaphor
Characters: Logan/Veronica, lil' reference to Logan/Parker
Rating: R
Word Count: 633
Disclaimer: I don't own any aspect of Veronica Mars or its characters
Spoilers/Warnings: None that I can think of.
Summary: A look at how Logan's relationship with Veronica Mars evolves and devolves.
A/N: I'm practicing writing some VM fic ( Read more... )

character: veronica mars, fandom: veronica mars, character: logan echolls, fanfiction, rating: r

Comments 20

superkappa April 18 2009, 00:40:24 UTC

For your first VM fic, I think this was a very good exploration of Logan's thoughts on Veronica. I could totally see him thinking like this.

I especially liked:
But, as always with a wild animal, Logan had the niggling feeling that she was more afraid of him than he was of her.

And:
She needed him - his protection, his support, his embrace - but she denied it constantly, and her rejection cut him to the core. It was never intentionally hateful, but it felt like a continual pick-pick-pick that hurt a little more each time.

And the ending made me sad. Because I always felt so bad for Parker. In some ways, she really never stood a chance, considering the job Veronica had done on Logan.

cruiscin_lan April 24 2009, 00:21:15 UTC

I feel bad for Parker too! Man. At least she kind of stood up for herself there and dumped him instead of hemming and hawing about it.

superkappa April 24 2009, 00:23:55 UTC

That's true. I did like that she once she realized how hung up he was still on Veronica that she wasn't going to be his replacement. It made her that much stronger of a character.

acinogan April 18 2009, 06:41:55 UTC

man, that glass part was right on. logan trying to be careful never works for very long. and veronica did always deny the better parts of her relationship with logan.

i think you have done a good job with logan's voice here, most especially in the first section.

of course, the second you post VM fic i have changed all of my icons to dollhouse. oh, well. i am mostly just happy you have written about some of my favorite characters.

cruiscin_lan April 18 2009, 20:06:05 UTC

That's okay, I have exactly zero VM icons! Glad you liked it.

dragynflies April 18 2009, 18:26:46 UTC

You already know how much I liked this. Hands down, this It was just one of the reasons he liked to call her "Bobcat." But, as always with a wild animal, Logan had the niggling feeling that she was more afraid of him than he was of her. was my favorite line, because it rings so true of their relationship. I feel like it was always missing that mutual trust, and you can't do a relationship without it.

I'm excited to see what you come up with for the epic fics! :)

cruiscin_lan April 18 2009, 20:04:15 UTC

It's gonna be tough. Because it's going to be fluff. :P

celtic_flicka April 18 2009, 18:59:51 UTC

I really love this! The broken glass metaphor was especially perfect. I hope you decide to write more VM!

cruiscin_lan April 18 2009, 20:03:04 UTC

Thanks! Glad you liked it, and maybe I'll try. I think I still need more VM practice.

vanessagalore April 18 2009, 19:47:52 UTC

I thought this was very good. I really liked the glass metaphor. However, as I'm sure you're aware, candlewaxdreams is not a fan of angst. Me personally: I have a hard time writing Logan without angst. He's just been through too much.

cruiscin_lan April 18 2009, 20:02:15 UTC

I know, right? When I think of Logan I think of him looking over his shoulder, a pout on his face and his eyes glistening. And I know candlewaxdreams likes fluff, but she told me it could start out angsty as long as it ends up fluffy, so I thought I'd figure out how Logan worked before I try to undertake something as challenging as in-character epic Logan fluff.