>.> Uh... I thought that this would help you as I noticed some mistakes with your grammar. They were just minor things though and otherwise, your grammar is very good, Doji! These are just suggestions for you that I've mostly put in bold to help you out.
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Kind, friendly and polite like a true gentleman, that’s the impression Allen Walker gives off to anyone that meets him for the first time, and that is only one side to him. He is kind and cares deeply about his friends or people he considers as his friends, regardless if the feeling is mutual or not.
However, underneath his nice exterior, Allen has something dubbed as his ‘Black’ side. This developed as a result of his time spent training under Cross Marian. He can be quite mean, completely willing to cheat at card games to win without regrets and has a delinquent side to him with a stubborn streak. He also has quite a temper, most notably seen whenever he gets called ‘short’ or ‘beansprout’, which can get quite nasty.
As an Exorcist, Allen wishes to save as many people
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Kind, friendly and polite like a true gentleman, that’s the impression Allen Walker gives off to anyone that meets him for the first time, and that is only one side to him. He is kind and cares deeply about his friends or people he considers as his friends, regardless if the feeling is mutual or not.
However, underneath his nice exterior, Allen has something dubbed as his ‘Black’ side. This developed as a result of his time spent training under Cross Marian. He can be quite mean, completely willing to cheat at card games to win without regrets and has a delinquent side to him with a stubborn streak. He also has quite a temper, most notably seen whenever he gets called ‘short’ or ‘beansprout’, which can get quite nasty.
As an Exorcist, Allen wishes to save as many people ( ... )
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That's less than I expected. I'M BETTER BETTER.
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