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[fic] The Penitent One

Aug 16, 2008 22:50

Series Title: The Penitent One
Author: creepy_crawly
Characters/Pairings: ShuuKira
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: Yaoi
Disclaimer: No own. No money. No shame.
Summary: For shuukira’s First Birthday Celebration. And because life never seems to be done whumping Kira.

( Seek first forgiveness; seek next revenge. )

yaoi, fanfic, kira izuru, slash, bleach, bleach fic, hisagi shuuhei, fic

Comments 16

arrankaara August 17 2008, 06:16:36 UTC

I am amazed. Simply and utterly amazed. This is one of the most well thought-out fanfiction that I've ever read from this fandom and I love it to pieces.

I love how you lay out the whole scenario, how you take your time to flesh out Kira's suffering and the aftermath of the incident. How fragile he was, how strong he had become. I love how Hisagi is his crutch at first and transformed into an equal as the story progresses. I love how you emphasis on Kira's fear and instead of making him bow his head, you make him hold himself in pride.

Bottom line is that I just love this.♥ Do continue to write for this fandom and best of luck for the competition! Thank you for sharing this gem of a fanfic!

creepy_crawly August 17 2008, 19:07:18 UTC

*blinks*

*glomps*

Thank you so much! Wow!!! I'm very glad that you liked this!!!

antha_aryn August 17 2008, 07:21:34 UTC

Wow. Amazing. Just...wow. Blind!Kira has been an idea in my head for months now but I never got to writing it. Yours is excellent in that you didn't make Kira a weakling or try too hard not to be. And I love how none of it seems rushed.

Kudos to a great fic! ♥

creepy_crawly August 17 2008, 19:07:48 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you liked!! Now go and write yours!

chibi_zoe August 17 2008, 09:51:06 UTC

That was wonderful! I have a weakness for well-written blindness fics ('cause I have such crappy eyesight myself) and this is beautifully written [faving]

creepy_crawly August 17 2008, 19:08:08 UTC

Aww, thank you! I'm glad that you liked it!

ceestar August 17 2008, 11:49:56 UTC

Oh-Oh wow!!!! That was stunning, you captivated so many emotions and so many little stories in there, ones of passion, anguish, strength, will and ... everything else!
The detail was amazing, your plot was captivating..umumummm... I really don't know what else to say but this was most definetly just ... WOW.
Good luck in the contest!

creepy_crawly August 17 2008, 19:08:24 UTC

Thank you very much! Glad you liked!

jamminbison August 17 2008, 17:24:40 UTC

Uhrm, I actually wanted to critique, but I feel I'd be a downer on all the comments already posted, even though I too enjoyed the fic...

creepy_crawly August 17 2008, 19:08:52 UTC

Please, critique away. Anything to get better!

Also. Your icon? BWAHAHA! THE WIN!

jamminbison August 18 2008, 06:47:01 UTC

Ok!

Well, I think it could have been more sensual since you were working with a blind Kira and the writing, though it conveyed that, could have made it a bit more apparent, I think. Would have helped show the difficulty he was having in adapting.

I also thought the pacing was a tad choppy, as it jumped from one thought to another without any real transition, especially the jump to the Gin scene. It was like, you had a lot of good ideas for scenes and stuff, but they were crammed into places awkwardly or too sudden for the pacing you may have been working with.
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Hur, nice icon yourself. ;D