Other Side of the Rainbow

[creepstakes]

Title: Other Side of the Rainbow
Genre: Crime and Investigation
Rating: PG (13 )
Warnings: Little bit of graphic imagery and swearing.
Paring: Mentioned YoukoxKurnue, KarasuxKuronue, YusukexKeiko.
A/N: Side story to Left and Returned. I am not pleased with it. Gnnnrrr.
Summery: Yusuke looked down to Karasu, a frown on his lips. “Yeah. I wonder who he

Comments

[blueutopiah]

One of the coolest things in this AU is that you gave Kuwabara his powers, and you did it in a believable way. Also, you gave Yusuke some of his shit-eating luck AND OH MY GOD SHUUICHI. I'm a sucker for him in this universe.

I liked this...you wrote Yusuke and Kuwabara amazingly well, and you must watch some CSI because you had a ton of forensics in there.

Oh, and Karasu's apartment? Brilliant. iwanttolivethere.

[creepstakes]

Kuwabara is love <3 And Yusuke and of course Shuichi >.<.

I watch entirely to much Wire in the Blood and CSI yes. To the point where I can say if something bullshit or not. >_>

Me too.

[nytekit]

I have no idea why you're not pleased with this, because I found it rather good, myself. I love the way you described Yusuke and Kuwabara, as well as Kuwabara's powers in the AU. All were very belieavable and well used/written.

Again, I do love how matter-of-fact Youko confesses to the murder. It's like, "I have no remorse. He deserved it." And I really like that. The only part that kind of bothered me was the ending. I like how Kuwabara did the flowers for Youko and all, but the explanation part seemed slightly off. Overall wonderful job, though!

Few grammar mistakes this gratzi noticed:
fake knifes where piled - knives
“But he here isn’t he?” - he is here or he was here
the odds are there worst.” - their
the last needed jigsaw piece he needed - 'needed' typo

[creepstakes]

Yes, that's the part I wasn't too pleased with, the ending I mean. I'll change it around a bit later when my head stops hurting.

*Salutes to you gratzi skillz* Thankyou for that.

[morsmordre87]

I can't exactly see how you're not pleased with it, this is pretty damn good. Cookies for writing Yusuke and Kuwabara so well (I love it when people do Kuwabara justice), and buttertoastShuichi was a bonus *g*. The "look of panic" thing made me chuckle.

Kuwabara's abilities were nicely done. And I like the fact that he put flowers on the grave, it does strike me as something he would do.

(Looks like I'm the only one who's a little afraid of Karasu's apartment)

[creepstakes]

Apparently I have a thing for guys with names that start with K. Kuronue, Youko, Karasu and Kuwabara. >_>

Poor Kuwabara dosn't get as much appriciation as he deserves. *pets him*