Comments | creativeslumber: FIC: Deconstruction (Roger/Various, R)

creativeslumber

FIC: Deconstruction (Roger/Various, R)

Dec 01, 2005 13:51

Title: Deconstruction
Fandom: Harry Potter
Pairing: Roger Davies/Various
Rating: R
Word Count: 2,205 words
Summary: The trick to having, he is told, is not wanting.
Additional Notes: Here it is, what appears to be another paper crane. For fanfic100, for the prompt Lovers.

( 'You know what people want the most?' he asks, shouting to be heard. )

character: roger davies, type: slash, type: rare ships, rating: r, challenge: fanfic100, word count: above 1000

Comments 4

a_linz December 1 2005, 19:30:34 UTC

I absolutely adore this. I expect that several hours later in the day I'll still be thinking about and might have to come back and read it again.

It's beautifully polished, I think I enjoyed each new part just as much as the last which is rare because normally you only like some parts of a story.

If he didn’t listen, he might end up really wanting her.

The other corollary is this: the rule reverses itself, in order to right itself, one way or another.

Because for pretty faces, you make exceptions.

Those lines just killed me.

Thank you for sharing :)

creativeslumber December 1 2005, 21:54:21 UTC

Aww, thank you! :D I'm glad you liked them all. :D

cupiscent December 1 2005, 21:23:21 UTC

I really enjoyed this. Maybe it's that I have a small Roger Davies fixation. Maybe it's just that this is well-constructed prose strung taut with meaning, weaving into something almost frantic but desperately laid back. I just really liked it.

I did, however, flounder with who was who. I picked Fleur, and Cho, but my confusion about the rest did actually detract from my enjoyment a smidgen. In the last parts, I wasn't even sure that the "he" was always the same "he" and while I was struggling with that I couldn't be full enjoying the tension created. And I wanted to be! Because it was great tension!

Regardless, I really enjoyed it.

creativeslumber December 1 2005, 22:09:04 UTC

Thank you, thank you. :D

And, thanks for pointing that out too. Sometimes I forget the way I've constructed Roger in my head isn't how people would see him. In order, the first guy is a random older dude, the blond kid by the fireplace is Cedric (:|), then yes, there's Fleur and Cho and the dark curly-haired girl is, in my head, Penelope's younger sister, the pretty boy is Blaise, the blond angel is Justin Finch-Fletchley, and we're back to Blaise. :P Hope that helped. :|