Fic: If I Never (Remus/Bellatrix)

[crazysexy_cool]

Title: If I Never
Rating: PG-13
Pairings: Remus/Bellatrix, a hint of Sirius/Bellatrix
Notes: For teawithvoldy's Crimson Green. ‘Still, still to hear her tender-taken breath’ is from Keats’ Bright Star. And yes, the tomato stuff is true.
Summary: Remus never takes dares.

Comments

[inathunderstorm]

Oh, that was just lovely!!

I really liked it. Anything with Bellatrix always gets my attention, and this was a great piece--really tense and lovely. I felt so bad for him about the plant!

[crazysexy_cool]

Hee, thank you!

I felt so bad for him about the plant!

*Facepalm* Eh, 'tomato' was one of the objects I had to incorporate into my fic. I had no fucking idea how to do it either, besides writing tomato food smut. :D

I felt so iffy about this piece, cos I love Remus/Bellatrix and as a result, I'm horrible at writing it, so thank you for saying that you liked it. Did you ever write your fic for the challenge?

[uliczka]

Oooh. Just 'oooh'.

[crazysexy_cool]

Hehe, thanks!

[eon028]

Wow. This is wonderful. I feel like I know the characters better than they do themselves. Bellatrix is such an unknown yet influential entity in the books, and this fic just brings her to life and adds another dimension to Remus.

[crazysexy_cool]

Thank you for taking the time to review! I was a little iffy about Remus's characterisation, so it's flattering to know that you like him. :)

[eon028]

Whenever an author makes a character so real that he or she seems to be more than human, it really makes me happy.

I've read a lot of books, and some of the writing doesn't even compare to some of the great ones I've seen in HP fanon, like this fic. Sometimes I wonder what would happen if the authors took their talent to the "real" world.

[crazysexy_cool]

Mmm-hmm. It irks me to look at the 'Romance' section in bookstores because the characters in those sort of novels are hardly ever developed and the plot is nearly nonexistant besides Introduction, UST, Sex Scene #1, Sex Scene #2, Happy Ending. You just know that if those authors wrote fanfic, their writing would most likely be chewed up and spit out by comms like deleterius or pottersues.

I suppose most of the writers in the fandom just find it easier to write with characters that have already been created and developed by another author; it saves a lot of trouble. And it is a little sad to think of all the Pulitzers and best sellers that some of these people could be writing.

[vafizziks]

Nicely done. I think you captured the Marauders' personalities very nicely (especially the short bit about Peter being caught up in the 'what ifs.'

I also liked Remus' ongoing debate with himself over Bellatrix.

As for the tomato plant, I was torn between feeling badly for Remus and giggling.

[crazysexy_cool]

As for the tomato plant, I was torn between feeling badly for Remus and giggling.

Me too. I did my best to not make it seem too ridiculous (a tomato, for crying out loud) but, eh, teenagers. :D

Thank you for the nice comment!

[kikei]

alsklska. Now I'm cringing because your Remus/Bella fic is so much better than mine. lakslaksa. *hides*

It's so sad. I actually like that ship, therefore I suck at it. But I love your fic. It's so wonderfully written, and Remus is such a perfect teenage boy.

-Kiks

[crazysexy_cool]

*Stares* Are you kidding?! You fic is beautiful, kikei! I read it a few days ago and thought 'Damn, damn, damn' because yours has actual plot and imagery and depth and mine's just about a freakin' tomato plant and Remus wanking off to some girl who doesn't give a shit about him. But thank you still for saying something so nice (though it's not true!).

I actually like that ship, therefore I suck at it.

Me too, ugh. I can only write about characters I dislike, which means that I should probably try my hand at Snape/Dobby.

[kikei]

*blinks* oi, are we talking about the same fic here? GAWD, I can't even read through it without alarm bells in my head! ha. Plot my foot ;) I just wanted an excuse to have Remus not be Mr. Perfect.

And just so you know, I've also written a fic where Remus has dreams of the sticky and embarassing kind about a certain Black girl (Andromeda in this case, huh) so I guess all comments said are well meant ;) Hee.

*hides from Snape/Dobby* I usually don't have problems with writing Remus, you know? But he just gets up and refuses to do things at times, bah. Especially things of the Bella kind ;) He keeps on nagging me to put him back with Tonks, hee. so he can be all gentlemanly and nice. He is so overrated ;)

-Kiks

[crazysexy_cool]

Pshhht. I've yet to come across a fic of yours that hasn't made me green with envy.

GAWD, I can't even read through it without alarm bells in my head!

Hee! I've read it three times now and everytime I think 'Why can't I write something like this?' Your writing really just sort of...swept me up, 'cause it's so deliciously dark and gah, you hurt my Remus but I forgive you. :)

I think I could like Remus/Andromeda, but there's something so wrong about R/B that just makes it HOT, you know? And add the Sirius factor in and you've got Drama.

But he just gets up and refuses to do things at times, bah.
*Nods* Sometimes I'd like to just smack him around and pair him with Sirius for the hell of it.

And duuuuuuude. Snape/Dobby is like, even better than JKR/Harry.