Blue Heaven, chapter 12

Dec 23, 2005 14:49


Chapter 11 was here.

Chapter 12 )

blue heaven, fruits basket

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umadoshi December 23 2005, 12:47:46 UTC
*blinks* I wasn't surprised by Saki's interference, but the execution definitely wasn't what I was expecting. Very good chapter! ^^

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hardlyfatal December 23 2005, 14:23:06 UTC
Thank you!

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bubblegum2000 December 23 2005, 12:56:48 UTC
Oh really interesting chapter!

I think you exaggerated the link between Akito and the cursed ones: we know they can resist Akito (Haru proved it). But you're right about their inner struggle: how they don't want to follow Akito but can't resist without being hurt, how they feel both love and hate towards their god.

Tohru is... well, Tohru. Her pitying Akito is not shocking at all when you know the girl.

Actually, the thing I liked the most in this chapter was Hana: I was sure she would try to defend Tohru against Akito the psycho but things turned so badly, I can't wait to see the consequences of her attack and what role Kazuma is going to have.

BTW, Hana doesn't say Tohru-chan but Tohru-kun ;)

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hardlyfatal December 23 2005, 14:24:14 UTC
Thanks for the help, will amend things when I have time!

Glad you liked it, thanks for reading :)

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tokyo_gurl December 23 2005, 12:57:05 UTC
WOW! update really ssoon please !!!!! hang in there kyo!

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hardlyfatal December 23 2005, 14:25:00 UTC
In a week or two, yes, will update. Thanks for reading, glad you liked it :)

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tokyo_gurl January 13 2006, 12:35:39 UTC
well? keep writing!!!!

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anonymous December 23 2005, 14:34:04 UTC
Wow! Your story was great! I felt my heart skip a beat as I read on. You made Akito so much like the way he was in the book! I could see in my mind your story in manga formation. Thats how cool it was.

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hardlyfatal December 23 2005, 14:43:02 UTC
Thanks so much! I really appreciate it :)

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french_bow December 23 2005, 15:06:11 UTC
NOOOOOOO!!!! You can't stop it there!!
*whines, cries, bangs head on floor*
That's a terrible place to stop, you eeeeeevil, sadistic, wonderful thing you!

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hardlyfatal December 27 2005, 18:47:47 UTC
Glad you like it :)

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