Fic: Tell you no lies

[crazyamoeba]

Derek Morgan had lied to him.

Derek Morgan had lied to him, Spencer tells himself as he stares at the ceiling whose every blemish was long ago catalogued. The wrinkles of the sofa cushions have moulded into his back. They feel old and cold despite his warmth. They have been there for days. The same ones, pressing into his skin.

And still, he

Comments

[toggledog]

Aaargh! That was incredibly painful to read- a testamount to how well it was written.
"They didn’t just drop dead and leave a body that looked so much like them but that refused to say the things that they said, and feel the things that they felt."
Such an incredible line.
Very subtle. I like it also that you don't go into detail as to how Morgan died.

[crazyamoeba]

Thank you very much, I'm really glad you liked it, and you are most kind with your praise.
Thanks so much for calling that line incredible, I wanted to convey something there, but wasn't sure that I got it quite right, so thanks.
Also , I'm glad that you found it subtle, and that the subtleness worked for you, I'm glad that the vagueness wasn't off-putting.
I'm sorry this took so long, and thanks again!

[moonflower75]

Terribly painful and written beautifully. I love your style: it's terse, concise and quite touching
and I adore this passage

And so Spencer, vaguely aware that this was insane, sick and unhealthy, would wander throughout the house, plaintively calling and searching.

When his search failed and he trailed back to his place on the sofa, distantly aware that this was the sort of behaviour that he had always feared he would start to exhibit, he would lie back and appreciate the irony.

The irony that the insanity that he had always feared may actually be encroaching, and now that it finally was, he welcomed it.

Because then, at least, Derek would not leave when he woke up.

thank you for posting this

[crazyamoeba]

Thank you so much for your praise, it really means a lot to me that you like my style. I'm happy that the concise structure worked, because I'm not always so good at getting my writing concise, even though I prefer that style.
Thanks so much for commenting on that particular passage, I really am thrilled that you liked it, because that was the part that I was having the most trouble with.
It's so lovely to have someone call my writing beautiful!

Thanks very much for commenting, and I'm sorry that I took so long to reply.