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[coyotescribbles]

new : fanfic : superjunior
rating : G
pairing : zhoumi + kyuhyun, other ninja!pairings
SJM-centric. if it fills you with rage, don't read. 2,020 words.

Comments

[kahel16]

For some reason, I've been thinking of Kyuhyun and Zhoumi like that. They seem to be... out of place, or somehow looking for a place to settle in the group. I don't know how to put mine in words, but you did perfectly. I like it a lot.

[angel_ehron]

Agreed!!

[kahel16]

*is happy that she is not alone* It just seems like that to me. Henry has built up a name for himself so soon after the debut of SuJu-M. I didn't expect Kyuhyun to appear "out of place" since he's already part of the main group of Super Junior.

[coyotecolored]

I see Zhoumi, especially, as looking for his 'niche' within the group, still... Kyuhyun's awkwardness/grumpy faces make me a little sad, but given the situation and being immersed in an unfamiliar language, plus the shift in inter-member dynamics, I really do think he has a little bit of 'new baby' syndrome going on. ^^;

[virginangelic]

One word:

Perfect.

[coyotecolored]

thank you, haha ^^;

[angel_ehron]

Awww!! You're writing is always so good. This story was really nice. I love reading all the new pairings and ideas that people are coming up with. This one is definately one of my favs so far. You should continue this ^_~

[coyotecolored]

thanks ^^ for me this was more just... jotting down ideas and reactions to the way they seem to interact, in clips, than actually setting out to write a story, but we'll see how Zhoumi and Kyuhyun settle in as SJM activities continue. I might be inspired to continue in this vein for awhile, depending on how it all goes~

[meiface]

This is painfully realistic. I think you've pinned everyone down perfectly, with their struggles and doubts and frustrations. I--really don't know what else to say to this. I think I'll come back to it and hopefully have something more coherent, but this is truly beautiful.

Things have been different since they got to China--more strained, and set on edge. [...] It concerns him, this unwillingness to talk, more than open outbursts would.

This entire paragraph is perfect.

[coyotecolored]

thank you ^^ like I said in a comment above, this was more of a personal exploration than anything, just because I like to investigate motivations and pick apart the underpinnings of things until they make sense in my head.

[meiface]

Then we must share telepathic brain waves! Because you pretty much wrote out everything I think SJM is feeling, only much more eloquently. I hope you write more on these boys in the future. :D

[ayray]

You wrote this pair just the same way that I see them. When I look on the screen and see dark cloud instead of Kyuhyun I think about all that emotions that you've listed above. And we don't know Zhou Mi's character yet, but you wrote that necessary minimum about his thoughts and feelings that looks very believable. Really, it's great fic.

[coyotecolored]

thanks ♥ I'm really hoping to see them both settle in comfortably; both for Kyuhyun to not look so much like he feels a little left out, and for ZM to find the place where he fits, as a member.