over the edge

[cosmicanomaly]

Title: over the edge
Pairing: yunjae
Rating: pg
Length: drabble
Summary: you are nineteen when you fall so hard in love you wonder how you'll ever get back up alive.
A/N: for Diana. Go wish her a happy birthday!

Comments

[yunho_ism]

beautiful angst. thanks for sharing.<3

[cosmicanomaly]

Thank YOU for reading and commenting! :D

[kiava_xxx]

Honey, it was so depressing, but for some reason it was really... hard to read. Idk, it might be just me and a second, third reads might prove me wrong, but I found it kind of confusing and ... heavy? Maybe that was your aim to begin with, and if it was- congratulations, you've made your readers feel the heaviness and darkness of the character right before he died. If not, erm, sorry for being so ignorant? ^^'

[kiava_xxx]

LOL you know what the irony is - like 5 minutes before I wrote this drabble, I was mourning about my writing to a friend 'cause I was re-reading old things and I was like, I used to be so disjointedly poetic and now look at everything I write: it's so simple and straightforward etcetc. So I legit tried to mimic myself from a few months ago and sob, the main criticism I used to get back then was 'your stories are too confusing' and LOL OTL I don't know how to not be confusing and still write like I want tbh I'm at constant war with myself about this part.

But I did intend to keep it dark and depressing and heavy etcetc - actually went back and rewrote it a couple of times 'cause I was worried it would be too light LOL. I just. Wanted to try doing that whole working with imagery and setting to set the tone of the fic and sobs /glomps for finding it that way LOL.

[cosmicanomaly]

Imagine if anon wasn't me LMFAO wouldn't that be weird.
But lmao I MEANT HEAVY IN TERMS OF EMOTION AND IF IT'S IN TERMS OF JUST THE WORDS THEMSELVES THEN I SUCK AND PLS DON'T BE DISAPPOINTED IN ME LMFAO.

[kiava_xxx]

Erm, I meant in terms of how easy the reading and assimilating process was. Not your words exactly, more like the whole thought flow. :/ I'm not disappointed though! I think I know why it ended up this way, actually. I think it's because you were actually trying to mimic a writing style (be it your own or somebody else's ... but lol, your own, hun, you're a first XD) which kind of put limits you the way you wanted to express your ideas. You can't really put your thoughts into words through somebody else's (in this case, your past you) mouth. Keyboard. Whatever. Your old writings weren't quite as confusing, tho. Some were a bit... vague in the description department, you used to leave a lot to your reader to figure out, which, as a reader, I find flattering xD But I think you overestimated your readers' smartness and guessing ability a little bit too much at times. Probably that's why some of the stories came across as confusing

[tanya_h24]

Oh my, the last two sentences o.o
It's so dark but beautiful. Thanks for sharing this <3

[cosmicanomaly]

Haha, I hope they left an impact! ;D
Thank you for reading and commenting! <3

[b0ojae]

They say it’s the fall that killed you

falling for him did..loved the double meaning

damn broke my heart

[cosmicanomaly]

Oops, I didn't mean to break your heart ! ! ;A; Sorry lol. Here, I'll fix it for you: <33

Thank you for reading and commenting. :D

[vavole]

Beautiful and intense angst.

[cosmicanomaly]

Sobs, thank you for reading and commenting. ;u;