Comments | cordelianne: BtVS Fic: Outside Pride (Spike/Xander, 2/10, PG-13)

cordelianne

BtVS Fic: Outside Pride (Spike/Xander, 2/10, PG-13)

Apr 17, 2007 13:04

I hope everyone's day is going well. Here's chapter two of the fic I'm posting for spring_with_xan!

Title: Outside Pride
Author: cordelianne
Chapter: 2/10
Pairing: Spike/Xander
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 1,188
Feedback: Comments will be very encouraging. Concrit is very welcome by email.
Disclaimer: Sadly not mine, Joss own them.
Summary: AU set at a summer camp.
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fanfic, btvs, outside pride, s/x fanfic

Comments 15

apreludetoanend April 17 2007, 18:08:50 UTC

More! Yay! I'm loving that we get to see more of Spike here!

It’s like a bloody nature movie, but with none of the fun violent parts. Hee! Awesome Spike!

It’s upside down, more like a net than a ladle or whatever it’s supposed to be. I love this--so much!

even a pack of those fruity wine coolers would hit the spot. hee!

There’s sputtering and adjusting of the shirt - none of which convince Spike of much. “What’s up with the touching? I mean, not touching in the bad way, not that there’s anything wrong with touching. As long as it’s consensual and can we just forget I said all that?” Spike was lost back at the first touching. Oh! So good! So Xander!

He breaks the eye contact. “Not really up for a round of campfire bonding so let’s just go our separate ways, forget we ever met.” And so Spike! Perfect!

He regrets this decision as soon as he hits the wall of happy chatter in the dining hall. Apparently Christian conversion comes with the bonus of becoming a “morning person” free of charge. He wants a refund. This line is more ( ... )

cordelianne April 17 2007, 22:08:56 UTC

Oh yay!!! Another awesome comment from Erin!!! eeee! I'm pleased that you're enjoyed seeing more of Spike, I thought it would be important to get his perspective on things.

I think you've quoted all the parts that I'm most proud of! I'm particularly happy that you enjoyed the Big Dipper description. Yay to those moments being very Xander and Spike - that's always excellent to hear!

One of the things I love about writing Spike is the snark - so it's great to hear that you loved the "morning person" lines. And yay to enjoying Andrew! I was so happy that he got involved in the scene (I say as if I had no control!) because Andrew amuses me so very much. hee - spatula-flailing excitement is awesome! I'm just realizing this is the second time I've referenced a spatula in a fic (the other time it was a G/X one), which is odd - clearly spatulas are an important theme for me! ;)

It's so lovely to hear that there's a mix of those elements! I'm delighted that you're enjoying the story and by your totally awesome comments. Thanks so much!! :D

yourlibrarian April 17 2007, 18:51:47 UTC

Xander’s shaking hands and grinning like a politician two days before an election. All that smiling is unnerving.

Hee, I can just picture that!

cordelianne April 17 2007, 22:16:25 UTC

Yay! I'm delighted that you can picture that! Thanks so much! :D

sunnyd_lite April 18 2007, 00:27:12 UTC

It's like a bloody nature movie, but with none of the fun violent parts. That's our Spike!

Ahh DramaQueen!Angel & Geek!Andrew nice!

Xander's shaking hands and grinning like a politician two days before an election.

luvin' it!

cordelianne April 18 2007, 01:27:24 UTC

Oh yay! I'm pleased that you said "our Spike"! *beams* And dramaqueen!Angel and geek!Andrew are such fun to write! Thanks for the quoting and I'm happy that you're enjoying!! Thanks!! :D

mireille719 April 18 2007, 05:44:50 UTC

... and I've just recognized the title of this story as being the name of everyone's favorite gay-unfriendly gardening-supply company. *g* Which makes it even *more* perfect.

I love Spike in this, I really do. (And Andrew with the spatula-waving flailing! How wonderful!)

I want to read all the rest now, but I know that if I do, May 17 is going to be a very long way away....

cordelianne April 21 2007, 04:33:11 UTC

Oh yay!!!!! I'm pleased you recognize the title!! It's very fun - and satisfying - to have the title be a reference to our favourite gay-unfriendly company!

Yay to loving Spike and Andrew in the fic!! I find Spike challenging to write but once I start it's also so much fun. And Andrew is always a blast to include!

And hee, I'm pleased that you didn't wait! Thanks so much! :D

brunettepet April 18 2007, 16:19:53 UTC

"Angel’s eyebrows are raised so high they make his forehead look normal." That line was mean, funny and nicely in voice. Spike's less than exuberant reaction to the camp and its participants is very amusing.

cordelianne April 23 2007, 01:37:41 UTC

I'm pleased that you enjoyed that line, and that it's in voice - it's important to me to have them in character without character bashing. It's great to hear that you liked getting Spike's viewpoint on the camp. Thanks so much! :D