Comments | corbeaun: Fic: (Narnia) Memory of Heaven

corbeaun

Fic: (Narnia) Memory of Heaven - Yuletide 2004

Jan 01, 2005 18:24

Written for: bantha_fodder in the Yuletide 2004 Challenge
Request 1: Chronicles of Narnia (Edmund Pevensie/Jadis/Lucy Pevensie)
Details: something during their reign at cair paravel, or set early in lww

Disclaimer: The world of Narnia and all its assorted characters are the creation of C.S. Lewis. No infringement intended.

( Memory of Heaven )

narnia: edmund, narnia: lucy, yuletide, fic: narnia, fandom: narnia

Comments 4

hesychasm December 4 2005, 00:44:27 UTC

I was just checking out Narnia stories at the Yuletide archive, anticipating the movie release, and I saw this story there, and followed links to your LJ. This is amazing. I mean, really, really good. You capture Edmund's issues, what must have been his issues, after all he'd been through from the London blitz to the White Witch, so well. And even Lucy is finely drawn, in just the perfect amount of words -- perfectly chosen words. The whole story is sort of breathtaking.

corbeaun December 5 2005, 04:19:29 UTC

Oh, thank you so much for the kind words.

I admit I took advantage of Edmund's betrayal to explore how the blitz must have affected the children. C.S. Lewis glosses over that -- with good reason, perhaps, in the interest of escapism -- but to me that's been a ache in the back of my mind since I read LWW.

I'm anticipating the movie release as well. There'll probably be an explosion of fanfic following its premier, and I'm certainly looking forward to that (although then Narnia might have to be taken off the Yuletide's list for next year).

Once again, thanks! *g*

glam_ang December 19 2005, 18:03:03 UTC

Oh, wow! This is excellent work! I particularly liked this line: Fevered adolescent dreams hook him with false-memories and in long winter nights he twists and slides like a caught fish between sheets made slippery with his sweat. Vivid, and I half-wondered if the Witch was sending him dreams.

corbeaun January 4 2006, 01:33:38 UTC

Um, wow, so so sorry for this belated thanks to your so thoughtful comment. (Holidays are a blast, but I'm so behind on LJ)

I really appreciate you telling me which line you particularly liked. The writing on story on the whole was as close to flow of consciousness as I've gotten to recently, but that line in particular flowed more self-consciously than the rest. I had wondered if I was being a little self-indulgent by including that sentence. Luckily, no one has minded so far. ;)