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Stretched Thin

Jun 14, 2011 23:18

Title: Stretched Thin
Author: coquilleon
Summary: Charles is exhausted. He just needs a moment to himself, but it gets harder and harder as the day goes on.
Genre: Romance
Rating: R
Pairing: Charles/Erik (side Hank/Alex, unrequited Hank/Raven)

( Charles throws himself to the hard concrete floor just in time - intense heat and blinding red light barely, so narrowly, misses his head as the wall behind him burst into flames )

x-men: first class, complete, rating: ma, fanfiction, charles/erik

Comments 18

angstbunny June 15 2011, 04:19:32 UTC

*_______________________________*

Love the side stories you had going, too, with Alex and Hank, and with poor Raven. But *__________* Erik offering comfort and reprieve to Charles. Ngh.

coquilleon June 24 2011, 05:21:28 UTC

aw thanks.

tuckatangent June 15 2011, 04:39:16 UTC

Just what Charles needed, some sexytimes with Erik. I really appreciated the Hank/Alex aside - it's not a pairing I thought of during the film, but it makes sense here. Hank can't be that clueless to miss all of Raven's signals. :)

I love how languid and dreamy your writing is here. It matches Charles' exhausted state perfectly.

coquilleon June 24 2011, 05:22:53 UTC

thanks!
i never thought hank/alex either, but I saw it in the comm and said 'why not?'

:)

pink_bambi13 June 15 2011, 05:33:37 UTC

I just love when the comm explores the everyday moments in the training sequences. It's just so fascinating. I loved everything about this, although, strangely, the part with Sean was my favorite. The near, I'm going to rip off your head but instead the tired silence that was only offered. Magical. Love it.

coquilleon June 24 2011, 05:23:34 UTC

hahaha
the Sean part was my fave too. :)
thanks. im glad you enjoyed it :)

scintillulae June 15 2011, 06:30:40 UTC

Very well done! :3 It's nice seeing their more "normal" moments, all the training they did in such a short amount of time should've left them all exhausted, aha.

coquilleon June 24 2011, 05:24:13 UTC

i know, i figured he would have some hard times.
thanks for commenting :)

zhadra_ahni June 15 2011, 07:22:57 UTC

I love. Your fics. So much.

I said it before, but there's such a sense of inhabiting the character you're writing-it's in the little details, it's in the perfect characterization, it's in the progression of pace, the steady build-up so that we're right there with Charles when he can't even handle Sean's interlude, that sense of a string vibrating, about to snap, but he just holds and holds that silence, and the tension is wonderful. I love the way you incorporate Charles's telepathy so smoothly; even as we're immersed in his struggles, input from the others is constantly coming in, and he's aware of it, reacts to it, receiving it both comes naturally to him and yet we can feel the overload building ( ... )

coquilleon June 12 2015, 08:45:57 UTC

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