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beyond_wonder July 25 2009, 23:43:00 UTC
Wow! You totally made my sunday morning! :D
I really liked this chapter - I wasn't expecting Carsile to appear and I really liked that you had them come back because of what happened in the meadow. It makes a lot of sense. I also liked Charlie's reaction - it was SO true to character.
I agree that Bella could be strong if she had of let herself. I think the way you wrote the end of the chapter is how she would react, she is very much about what is good for everyone else. So I liked that her thoughts reflected her change in attitude. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter. I can't wait to see her reunited with Edward and Alice!

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coquette7 July 27 2009, 19:19:51 UTC
Hey, sweetie! Glad you enjoyed the chapter. (omg i love writing angry charlie - so fun). :)

New chapter is up if you'd like to read it. Thanks for reviewing!

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singnovember July 25 2009, 23:53:26 UTC
Oh man. Really good chapter and your author's note made it even better. I NEED A STRONG BELLA.

I have to say that Carlisle really rubbed me the wrong way this chapter. I thought it was borderline cruel to just show up and act like nothing ever happened, when she's so clearly spent the last few months deteriorating (one thing in Eclipse that always annoyed me was how the physical changes that depression brought about in Bella were just completely brushed off).

(I really wanted an apology to Bella from the Cullens who weren't Edward in the books. They all agreed to leave Bella alone and she was almost killed by forces they brought into her life. That's another problem I've had with NM and Ec.)

I totally started rooting for Charlie to go kick some butt. In fact I may have yelled "hells yes!" when he saw Carlisle. ;)

I'm so getting obsessed with this story.

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coquette7 July 27 2009, 19:21:51 UTC
I NEED A STRONG BELLA TOO OMG

(and angsty, repentive edward -- is that too much to ask, smeyer?)

RE Carlisle, there's a story behind his coolness toward Bella. More on that in the next chapter. :) (Which by the way, I just posted.)

Glad you're enjoying the story, sweets! Thanks for reviewing. I really appreciate it.

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anonymous July 26 2009, 00:08:29 UTC
You've done a super, super job. you write like they are your characters and I always cannot wait to read the latest chapter! Fantastic!

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coquette7 July 27 2009, 19:22:23 UTC
Thank you! :)

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door July 26 2009, 00:35:32 UTC
Wow. I barely breathed while reading this. Tense doesn't even begin to describe it. I can't wait for more!

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coquette7 July 27 2009, 19:23:24 UTC
Yeah, this is a bit of a tense story, isn't it? I actually had to write something lighter and sillier yesterday just to kinda snap out of it. O_o

Just posted the next chapter if you'd like to read it. :)

(like your icon, btw ... it's cute!)

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door July 27 2009, 20:35:21 UTC
Thank you! I read it and long, as always, for more.

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kudosirony July 26 2009, 00:38:55 UTC
Oh, I'm so excited; this is fantastic so far. That is one of my huge gripes with the series - the fast reunion. I can't wait to read your take on it - your Bella is always so much stronger and I love it. Is this already pre-written or are you just getting the chapters out fast at this point?

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coquette7 July 27 2009, 19:25:56 UTC
Oh, man ... the fast reunion drove me BATTY. O_o Batty, I say!

To answer your question, no the story isn't pre-written. But like a lot of my stories, when I first come up with the concept, I write out pivotal scenes very quickly ... so the skeleton is there. It shouldn't take me too long to finish this one. I don't think I'm going to drag it out much further than 20-30k words. :)

Thanks for commenting, bb! *hugs*

ETA because I forgot to tell you a new chappie is up. :)

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