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singnovember August 8 2009, 23:35:32 UTC
I am suspicious of the tie.

I love how human this Charlie is, and how much of NOT AN IDIOT he is. Normally I would hate the idea of Edward going to him before settling things with Bella (it would smack of macho bullshit), but in this case I quite like it. In the books it seems like Edward always gets Bella into trouble and she gets punished soundly* or yelled at. I like that Edward straightened things out with Charlie so that she didn't have to come home to his anger at whatever choice she made about Edward.

*Incidentally, one of the reasons I feel like Charlie is an idiot in the books is that I was the most childish 18-year-old ever, and even then there was no way I was young enough to be punished like he does to Bella, with grounding and what-not. But I digress.

I liked this chapter! Take your time on the epilogue getting it right-your speed of updates is already pretty incredible.

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coquette7 August 10 2009, 14:32:18 UTC
I am suspicious of the tie.

I don't know why, but that made me grin. :D

Thanks for reviewing, hon. You always make me smile. I just posted the epilogue, btw. *hugs*

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poeticfrog August 9 2009, 00:06:12 UTC
Ahhh poor Edward...his misery is so beautiful! I also love how involved Charlie is in this, feels more realistic to me! Beautifully written as always hon! Can't wait for the epilogue!

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coquette7 August 10 2009, 14:35:43 UTC
his misery is so beautiful!

lmao ... I know. He's way too fun to torture.

Thanks again for reviewing, bb. :) *hugs* Just got the epilogue up.

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indigo_gone August 9 2009, 01:12:19 UTC
I lovelovelove how Edward talked to Charlie. :D And his tie, too. Mmm, boys in ties: I always picture ol' Eddie in all black, and it is WONDERFUL. Lovely, again.

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coquette7 August 10 2009, 14:37:30 UTC
I lovelovelove how Edward talked to Charlie.

Yeah, I didn't like how Charlie hated Edward so much in Eclipse. I thought ... I dunno ... like Charlie could have empathized more after all that went down with Renee. Not really realistic after Bella disappeared for days on end, but in my story I think it works. ;)

Thanks for reviewing! *hugs* Just posted the epilogue if you'd like to read. :)

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demosthenes91 August 9 2009, 01:36:04 UTC
Edward in a tie with an untucked shirt... all I can see is Is There Something I Should Know Simon LeBon.... *sigh*

Tieward FTW!

And I really do like how you write Charlie!

Whatever you come up with, multiply it by fire.

LOVE that line! Even scarier considering that fire could actually do him some damage.

I like that image of them at the end, holding each other on the ground, him promising to show her his love... *le sigh* Makes the epilogue so worth waiting for!

:^D

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coquette7 August 10 2009, 14:38:22 UTC
Is There Something I Should Know Simon LeBon.... *sigh*

Oooh, I haven't read that one. Any good? I should check it out.

Thanks for the review! :) And I love your icon. lmao

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sparklindiva August 9 2009, 03:45:38 UTC
I love your writing so so sooooo much :)

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coquette7 August 10 2009, 14:39:16 UTC
Thanks, bb. ;D *hugs you*

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