Improv fic: "Morning" 5/5 HS/OB

Feb 18, 2003 16:42

Gah, I'm such an idiot. Promise this was written on time...I just suck. *bats eyelashes prettily at Zarah & begs forgiveness ( Read more... )

orli, hsinclair

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savageseraph February 18 2003, 21:26:18 UTC
Really vivid taste details, and I like the middle part of this a lot, the part about Orlando knowing the important things.

This made me squee:

Harry pulled Orli flush against him, leaned his forehead against Orli’s, took a deep breath. Tasted the difference in the air, in himself, in his world. “Thank you for waking me up.”

The "waking me up" part just resonates so nicely with different shades of meaning.

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Re: azewewish February 21 2003, 02:14:10 UTC
Thank you!!!

Yeah, I'm very fond of Orli in this overall series. He's incredibly patient, which is good, since Harry's pretty clueless. *grins*

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caras_galadhon February 19 2003, 01:37:31 UTC
Oh, thank goodness. I was wondering where Part 5 had gone, and even though I picked up the monitor and checked behind the desk, I was coming up empty and distressed. *G*

This entire series has made me very, very hungry. I'm sorry it's over now, to tell you the truth.

Among all the other fabulous taste-centric lines, I loved --
Reminded Harry of amaretto cheesecake, only without the graham cracker crust.
-- a lovely description, with a nice humorous edge.

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Re: azewewish February 21 2003, 02:10:40 UTC
Eep! Sorry about that, I truly am. No rattling the monitor...bad for it, yo.

*pets* Thank you! I'm a little reluctant to let go of this Harry & Orli myself, but I suppose I'll have to.

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