Hasn't even been a day since the challenge was posted, but I had the time (when I was supposed to be unpacking, surprise, surprise), and I jumped to write it. Fuck yeah
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I read this late last night, and had to sleep before making any coherent feedback on it, but I really like it. The way that the narration flows is very natural, informal but good. I usually have problems with Ewan fic, but I didn't have a problem with this one, because you did a good job at getting across the loneliness, and how even after they got together, things weren't going to be alright. And that last line indeed is very fitting. And I must still be asleep, because I can't think of anything else to say but good and very good.
Ooh, I'm not the only one with late night computer deficiency... fantastic.
Wonderful. Just, wonderful. I'm glad you liked it, and even moreso glad that you did even with the Ewan squick. I wanted to have pathos for Ewan, not the, ooh, bad-boy on the prowl that can always be opted for, and that's usually always alluring in itself. So yay, glad it worked for you!
I also liked how Eve was actually brought into the picture and not simply not mentionned as is too often the case with Ewan fics.
Glad you liked this bit. Even though I'm wishing that I had added so much more (what could I do, though, with it being an improv?), I'm glad that this bug bit me and kept reappearing. I guess it's the sort of, Ewan has to be portrayed as loving, as caring, and he loves and he cares for his wife. But people slip. And that's what this is all about. Trip hop.
Should definitely be more Ewan fics, though. *grins* Glad you liked!
Great job. The style, the characterization, the struggle, the setting...You did it all so well, and that's definitely amazing given such a short time frame. The last word was definitely effective in encompassing and giving a twist to rest of the fic.
I must see BHD sometime. All the pretty boys and fun possibilities, and I'm missing out on all that!
Why, thank you, thank you. I wish I had had more time... there would have been so much more that I would have liked to add. It's so minimalistic, you know? But in a way it's better this way. Raw.
Ever so glad you liked it. ;)
I must see BHD sometime. All the pretty boys and fun possibilities, and I'm missing out on all that!
Yes, you should! And you will, I'm sure. Who knows. You might even contribute to the slashiness. There's a BHD slash list, didja know? Join us. The water is cool and refreshing. *nudge, nudge*
Very, very lovely story. This slow, delicious shift from yeah, maybe to full-out need is just... yes. I loved it. And also, there's all this wonderfully delicious atmospheric, um. Stuff. (Hey. It's late, okay?) Which makes this story deliciously sexy, but not in a cheap way. ::nods::
Aw, thank you. Tried some new things with this one. Had no idea where it was going, but it went. Andeek, Ewanslash. Who would have thought it. *pats herself on the back*
Atmospheric stuff, eh? I'll ah, keep that in mind... ;) Get some sleep! Go!
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Wonderful. Just, wonderful. I'm glad you liked it, and even moreso glad that you did even with the Ewan squick. I wanted to have pathos for Ewan, not the, ooh, bad-boy on the prowl that can always be opted for, and that's usually always alluring in itself. So yay, glad it worked for you!
Thank you! *grins*
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I also liked how Eve was actually brought into the picture and not simply not mentionned as is too often the case with Ewan fics.
Glad you liked this bit. Even though I'm wishing that I had added so much more (what could I do, though, with it being an improv?), I'm glad that this bug bit me and kept reappearing. I guess it's the sort of, Ewan has to be portrayed as loving, as caring, and he loves and he cares for his wife. But people slip. And that's what this is all about. Trip hop.
Should definitely be more Ewan fics, though. *grins* Glad you liked!
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I must see BHD sometime. All the pretty boys and fun possibilities, and I'm missing out on all that!
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Ever so glad you liked it. ;)
I must see BHD sometime. All the pretty boys and fun possibilities, and I'm missing out on all that!
Yes, you should! And you will, I'm sure. Who knows. You might even contribute to the slashiness. There's a BHD slash list, didja know? Join us. The water is cool and refreshing. *nudge, nudge*
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Atmospheric stuff, eh? I'll ah, keep that in mind... ;) Get some sleep! Go!
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