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The Boarding House

Jul 06, 2007 02:42

Title: The Boarding House
Author: toonmili
Prompt #: 6
Word Count:3537
Summary: While searching for Remus, Tonks stays at a boarding house with a mysterious tenant.

SETTING: Post War.
RATING: PG
GENRE: Romance, Angst.

Nymphadora Tonks looked down at the words scribbled by her own hand. A stranger on the street recommended this place to her and she ( Read more... )

author: toonmili, last hurrah challenge

Comments 3

kerrymdb July 6 2007, 06:11:53 UTC

Mystic Boarding House was a small house in the back streets of big old city that looked like it had been ripped form a fairy tale
Lovely imaging there! I really enjoyed the imagery in the first paragraph.

“I gave up everything for him, my job, my friends and family, he is my home.”
Such a romantic line! But in context, it's so heartbreaking for her. Poor Tonks!

He moved closer to her and wrapped his arms around her and pulled her close to him. He stroked her hair gently as she cried.
This is absolutely heartbreaking! I'm so glad, though, that you gave us readers a hopeful ending. The tenderness Snape shows her is wonderful. Perhaps she and Snape can start a life together. One without Remus!

Good work! :)

zephyrosity July 6 2007, 06:16:05 UTC

Oh, that evil Remus! A two year old baby! That means he knocked up his wife 3 months after he left Tonks. Rrrrr. Hating on Remus is one of my favorite past times and you've definitely given me fuel for that fire.;)
Someone, once said "No matter how much Tonks' loves him, in Remus' mind, she'll never be good enough for him." I think that's very true here.

Just a head up. There's some spelling mistakes, but it didn't cause any problems with following the story. I only mention it in case you might want to know. I constantly misspell "receive", so I know how that can happen.

toonmili July 6 2007, 06:27:34 UTC

Hey guys thanks for the comments. I have to admit that my fingers are itching. I intended this to be a one-shot but that is so hard. I feel like I should continue this but I know there'll have to be some sex and I am no good ( and I mean noooooo good) at writing sex.

Snape and Tonk always have to have sex but it will only happen years after.

As for Lupin. Grrr. he's so evil. I wrote the story and I can't believe he did that to Tonks. I hope he has a damn good explaination.

I know I sound Loony right now but sometimes these characters just do what they want. I didn't intend him to have to two year old child but somehow he decided to get the woman knocked up.

As for errors: It's my sig. That's what I tell people anyway.

I'll try to correct them.