Second fan-fiction ever!

[colormesun]

Title: Let's build castles in the air ;
Pairing(s): Ohmiya
Genre: Less angst, more fluff 'n' comfort this time 'round!
Rating: PG for language and demi-adult concepts.
Summary: Nino still nurses his wounds. Ohno helps along the process.
A/N: Can be read as a one-shot drabble-thing, or a "Part II" after Build Me Up, Buttercup.

Comments are appreciated! :D

Comments

[yamapiislove]

I'm gonna kill that adult who keeps tsk-ing them xD
This was as great as your first story.
I just love your writing style and I still can't believe you never wrote before.
Ohmiya is ♥
Thank you for this and I hope you continue on writing :)

[colormesun]

:D thank you for your support! *hugs*
i have a writing 'style'? yay. haha.
comments are ♥.
Hehe thankss again. :D

[carey_chan]

I really liked it. But I need to tell u something.
Eventhough I`m a huge Ohmiya fan i think you might have rushed things too much.
You showed your readers how much nino`s suffering after being dumped..and even though he might have feelings for ohchan in his heart, I actually dun think that he can answer riidas love just yet.
hope you don`t feel offended or something,because I liked the way you write and want you to improve and become an even better writer^^

[colormesun]

oh noo x) i think i interpreted the scene in my head wrongly.. the whole "i love you" thing was supposed to be like an everyday occurrence, like they've done it a million times (off-cam and on), and nino is surprised to find that today, he says it and it triggers something.. unknown. hehe. thank you for your constructive criticism! i really appreciate it. :)

i will try to edit the ending of the story to make the pacing more suitable..
arigatou :D

[barefootprint]

that was so so sweet!!

i'm glad he overcame that depression he had. good thing ohno's there for him!

ithat annoying adult, ruining the ohmiya moment. tsk. haha. i just realized. ebisu garden seem to be the pace for lovers in fics. haha.

love love the ending! thanks for sharing! =3

[colormesun]

ahaha thank you :)
i really love happy comments.
and YA RIIGHT. annoying adult x)

1. the cafe they ate in was one that i ate in when i was in tokyo
2. i also went to ebisu garden!
3. yes i am purposely putting in all the places i went to in japan! because it makes me happy :3. fufufu.

thank you for commenting! <3

[starfruitangel]

YOUUU ♥ I just re-read your Build me up Buttercup story the other day and was hoping for an update and then THIS. I loved the whole description about the would haves if nino and the girl lived in the apartment, and and guilt concious nino having to pay for a parking ticket. And Ohno being ohno with his healing presence:) I take it this is going to be a series?? :) looking forward to reading!

on a side note, are you new to the fandom too? :) Just that... nino doesnt really like kids and doesnt really want to have them even if he gets married, so that bit about the nursery and he breaks down was abit ooc for me.

[colormesun]

1. thank you for commenting!
2. i have no idea x) personally, i have this problem where i have absolutely no confidence in my writing. it's actually a big step for me just to post it up here in public, haha, usually i don't even let my closest friends read what i write. hehe. so, maybe it WILL be a series. x)
3. omg you're right! i've been in the fandom for almost half a year and omg nino's my favorite too. how could i forget? :( thanks for pointing it out! :) i think i'm pretty happy w the nino in this part though, but i'll keep it in mind for the next piece i write. seriously, thank you!

[colormesun]

:D thank you for commenting!
i'm looking forward to writing more!
but i'm not always so confident to post it online, haha, so we'll see.