Comment-A-Thon Round 10 - Flashfic Challenge, the Sequel

Sep 01, 2011 14:37

For those who recall the last flashfic challenge, this is pretty much the same but with a brand new prompt ( Read more... )

round nine

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kriadydragon September 28 2011, 21:57:37 UTC
Prompt/Request: Exhausted Neal Aftermath ( ... )

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Fill: The Raveled Sleeve of Care, chapter 1 (part 1 of 2) kriadydragon October 3 2011, 03:49:09 UTC
Neal dashed into the underground parking, relief flooding his being as he saw Elizabeth in Peter's arms. The relief settled in his knees; he sank abruptly to the concrete floor, his gaze on the agents hauling Keller away, and on Peter and El. Few of the excited, milling agents noticed him at first, but Diana sidled over to him, a tight smile on her lips. She held out a hand but Neal waved it away. Even with a hand up he feared he'd just embarrass himself by collapsing again. He gave Diana a weak smile to keep her from worrying about him ( ... )

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Fill: The Raveled Sleeve of Care, chapter 1 (part 2 of 2) kriadydragon October 3 2011, 03:53:33 UTC
Re: Fill: The Raveled Sleeve of Care, chapter 1 (part 2 of 2) tj_teejay October 3 2011, 07:30:18 UTC
Oh, this is excellent. More, please!

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Re: Fill: The Raveled Sleeve of Care kriadydragon October 3 2011, 16:26:52 UTC
Thanks! I'm ready with chapter 2, but chapter 3, which should be the final part, I'm still working on.

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Fill: The Raveled Sleeve of Care, chapter 2 kriadydragon October 3 2011, 16:57:42 UTC
The urgent care staff put El on a converted examining bed in a tiny temporary room that barely fit both Peter and Hughes, standing, as there wasn't room for a chair. Though Reece was determined not to leave Peter alone, he had to spend a good deal of time out in the hospital atrium on his phone. El was breathing pure oxygen for anxiety. Peter held her hand and watched the sedative take hold. Alone with her while she dozed, Peter took ten quiet minutes to feel how lucky and grateful he was and how much he loved her. Then he went to walk off some of his nervous energy. From the little coffee counter he saw metal tables outside on a rooftop terrace. Beyond them, around the bend of a container garden walkway, he spotted a familiar form. It could only be Neal, but Neal's body position was unusual. He sat at a bench, bent forward, forearms resting on his thighs, staring at the hat in his hands ( ... )

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Re: Fill: The Raveled Sleeve of Care, chapter 2 kriadydragon October 4 2011, 05:47:42 UTC
*Claps* Love this! Thank you so much :D

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Re: Fill: The Raveled Sleeve of Care, chapter 2 kriadydragon October 4 2011, 16:47:31 UTC
I'm so glad!

Chapter 3 is in the works.

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Re: Fill: The Raveled Sleeve of Care, chapter 2 tj_teejay October 4 2011, 06:30:02 UTC
Lovely! Loved this last part too.

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Re: Fill: The Raveled Sleeve of Care, chapter 2 kriadydragon October 4 2011, 16:48:11 UTC
Thank you! I really appreciate the encouragement.

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Fill: The Raveled Sleeve of Care, chapter 3 (part 1 of 2) kriadydragon October 6 2011, 21:37:24 UTC
Peter kept El beside him as they picked up Chinese on the way home. Once there, he transferred the food into the oven to stay warm and set about fortifying their home. He called every home security company he could get to answer the phone and offered exorbitant amounts of money if they would install their toppest-of-the-line systems that night, but not a single company could respond that quickly, no matter what he offered ( ... )

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Re: Fill: The Raveled Sleeve of Care, chapter 3 (part 1 of 2) kriadydragon October 7 2011, 03:55:28 UTC
Awwww! That scene with the bear melted me into a puddle of warm, fuzzy goo. And then El wanting both her boys on either side of her melted me again.

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Re: Fill: The Raveled Sleeve of Care, chapter 3 (part 1 of 2) kriadydragon October 7 2011, 04:13:39 UTC
\o/

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Re: Fill: The Raveled Sleeve of Care, chapter 3 (part 2 of 3 kriadydragon October 8 2011, 20:07:25 UTC
--Sorry about the strange numbering, but it just keeps getting longer ( ... )

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Re: Fill: The Raveled Sleeve of Care, chapter 3 (part 3 of 3) kriadydragon October 9 2011, 00:32:44 UTC
Already distressed and exhausted, within minutes he was bored. Unless he could use them in a con, Neal paid little attention to sports, and football was at the bottom of the list of things he might be interested in. A game of brute force where the winner one week was the loser the next. Even a championship wasn't something anyone could keep; someone else would win it the next year. While he could understand why someone would play in a sport-the thrill of competition, the fun of outwitting-he had no idea what fans got out of it at all ( ... )

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Re: Fill: The Raveled Sleeve of Care, chapter 3 (part 3 of 3) kriadydragon October 9 2011, 01:26:27 UTC
Awwww! I loved this so much! Thank you, thank you, thank you :D

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