Unofficial-final draft

[coasterholic14]

Ok, here's my unofficially-final draft. If anyone see's any changes they think i missed, or made that i shouldnt have, or didnt make that i should have, let me know. If you think something's wrong, don't be afraid to tell me, if it hurts my feelings, oh well, i'll get over it (it probably wont anyway). I want this to be as good as possible (even

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The only thing I can find :-(

[blackcatgrl09]

eleven year old = eleven-year-old.

It's very good, really.

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*pets*

[hoppityhop]

Don't know if it's too late to add this......

you prolly shouldn't have the contractions. I know that's the style you might be aiming for... but really, I wouldn't do it in a paper being sent to college admissions people....

Other than that it's very good.