Last and Alone - Secret Part 10

[cmdrtekk]

 Last and Alone - Secret
Title:  Part 10
Rating:  T
Characters:  Jazz, the Monolith Team
Warnings:  Mech x Mech hinted at/mentioned occasionally
Universe:  G1-ish/Last and Alone/Monolith
Disclaimer: I, in no way, shape, or form, own the Transformers© franchise or the characters it contains.  They belong to Has/Tak, No infringement intended.  Any OC’s

Comments

[kirin_saga]

Another update so quickly!

Jazz taking control of Perceptor's movement was unexpected. And Perceptor felt resigned at that... he probably thinks Jazz did it because he didn't trust Perceptor anymore. The link doesn't go two ways does it? Perceptor can't feel Jazz's emotions.

I love how Team Monolith interacts with each other. And how Cav feels about making Cep and Tonic leave early. Have I mentioned that I love Perceptor's nickname?

“You going soft Cav? You were almost nice to junior there.”

“Almost? I thought I was nice.”

“Too much intimidation cost you the full nice and gets you almost.” I loved that part. And the part where they were discussing the third team's name

[cmdrtekk]

Regarding time frames, you can again take a look at my working notes. They are better at conveying what I am picturing since I have been trying to keep the math pretty general in the story (it’s hard enough working in vorns as it is). The math has been a pit to work with so it is entirely possible I messed up somewhere (a reminder to myself why I need to stay away from “epic” stories, though this has indeed been fun). My intent has always been that the third gestalt is several thousand vorns younger than the first two, who why'll still a good thousand or so vorns separated in age themselves, are still similar in age by Cybertronian standards and have known each other for a very long time by the time of the third gestalt. My notes carry more specifics, but again, for better or worse, I have tried to be general when it comes to math in the story and that may come back to "bite" me. The potential for spoilers in my notes still holds true until the end of the next chapter though, so be warned if you choose to go look. As they are "

[mmouse15]

Oh, the snark! Primus, that was great! I love how comfortable the team is with each other by this point, and with the second gestalt team, and you really conveyed how creepy/scary that third gestalt was before you even got the the name. Loads of tension before the merge.

Agreed that this was another wonderful chapter.

[cmdrtekk]

Thank you. :-)

[okamichan]

(Goodness you're getting these up quickly)

You did leave me twitching at the end of the last chapter. XD

I'm not really big on talking heads, but I think they keep that feeling that Jazz is skimming through Perceptor's files. They're just more interaction between the team, fascinating enough for him to linger, but not too slow what with Perceptor's signs of stress. Then he pauses for that nice long gander at Volatilus' awakening. Nice. :)

I am also enjoying the interaction between the team. They've got a nice dynamic.

(and just what the heck were Tonic and Foist doing anyways? Too distracted to keep their shields in place, hmmmmmm? :3)

[cmdrtekk]

(end of the quickness)

Hmmmmmm. Just what were those two doing? That their bond shields were weak, and I'm thinking their other four teammates were reinforceing their own. Not that everyone doesn't get the whole picture everytime the team merges.

:-, SICS

Thank you for reading.

[snugsbunny]

Heh! I'm loving this, the last part with the names for the third gestalt was win XD

Though what is up with that third gestalt, why is it being kept, almost secret from the other two?