Remediation Village

[cloudscudding]

Think I'm settling on "Remediation Village (Probationary), Inner Mongolia" as the title.

Still long. Still maybe too much punctuation. But it's got the hooks for remediation and Inner Mongolia, and I hope the (probationary) adds a little tension. I dunno. It's better than what I had before.

Comments

[fayde]

I think first your readers would have to know what "remediation" means. I don't. :( I'd probably skip it unless someone else strongly recommended it to me and gave me some kind of discriptor of the story.

EDIT: ok, so I take that back a bit. After thinking about it, I realized I did know what remediation meant. I even looked it up to be sure I was correct. However, I'd still skip over the title since it doesn't make much sense or grab me in any way.

Also, is this a work of fiction? If it sounds more like a title for a study of some sort, if that's what it is, it is more appropriate.

[cloudscudding]

Well, it's a science fiction short story, so the science-y bit works, I hope. :) I know, it's not everybody's cup of tea.

[susanofstohelit]

how about using a scary sounding acronym and starting with this as a setting header?

[cloudscudding]

Hmm. It's not exactly a setting, and scary-sounding acronym doesn't quite fit the mood--but you may have something there.

I'm simply awful at titles. I mean, I've worked out a few "must-haves," but beyond that--eek.

[cloudscudding]

You're just spoiled because my last title had slashes.