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[clarinetkate]

well, I wrote something and it's unbetaed and also unfinished, but I don't know if I'll do much more with it, so fuck it, here it is (and wow, has a more enticing intro to a fic ever been written? I think not):

Comments

[gigantic]

That's sort of perfect in itself and could be built on, I think, but doesn't necessarily need to be.

I don't know that much about G Unit and here you've created a picture of what it could be like. It's a part of an even bigger whole that I can believe and follow without knowing too much about each of the subjects. I especially like the way Yayo starts off as one those guys -- he's just someone trying to get his kicks and who's oblivious to what's going on around him. Then you add that last paragraph and it turns out that he does realize some things, but then why wouldn't he? After all, it's like you said:...when it's a secret, if you're in a crew with someone, you just know shit like that.

Everything fits in and ties together and just works. I enjoyed this.

[katienyc]

Ooooh, I like it! The last line is the best:

He knows that 50 won't let the groupies lick anything of his. He knows 50 might let Banks, cause he comes home every night and tells 50 and Banks about the latest bitch he fucked and has to pretend he doesn't see them pretending not to see each other.

It's just perfect. How everyone knows what's going on and is pretending that they don't.

[overloved]

I love how this is circular. Frankly, I would love to see something develop btwn Banks and 50. And I'm also getting a feeling there's something else up with Young Blood. Very nice, Kate.

::goes to find visual aids::