Drowned

[claire8sterling]

Okay, so this is the beginning of a short story based off a dream I had. Read it, and please comment on it saying what you think, whether you loved it, hated it, or thought it was eh (though I will note that right now I'm not for critiques, if I want one, I'll ask). Either way, I'm not going to post the rest of it until a certain number of people

Comments

[alyssajlewis]

I wonder what they did. Hmm.

I like the structure of the piece, how it ends with the countdown. :)

[jynnmorgan]

AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH don't tell me that's only the first half? Is it really? That was more like, a prologue than half.

Anyway, I really liked it. Don't worry, I'll get you those 28 other people if it kills me.

[anonymous]

I would like to say that it seems like a very interesting plot line anddddddddddddd I want to see the rest of it.

LOVE

[ext_284649]

This sounds VERY promising! I'm intrigued already. I WANT THE REST. I will find you the rest of those 30 people.<33

Awesome

[marcdelta]

I like how the speaker seems to retain their sense of humour during all of this.

"I'm not in a situation where I can be objective about this kind of stuff."

Very nicely done.