Prison Break - You Do

[clair_de_lune]

Title: You Do
Author: clair-de-lune
Fandom: Prison Break
Pairing: Michael/Lincoln
Category: Slash
Rating: R
Warning: Incest
Word Count: ~ 410
Summary: You don’t think of your brother that way. (Pre-series)
Author’s Note: This is a small ficlet for halfshellvenus’ birthday, loosely based on a prompt she offered months ago (Michael/Lincoln, secret longing). Happy birthday and

Comments

[halfshellvenus]

Oh, that was just wonderful! So full of shame and guilt, and yet with so much poorly-restrained lust and longing that you want Lincoln to mean it when he calls Michael over. I was on the edge of my seat over whether that might go to a yes, even though Michael knew better.

Absolutely delicious! Thank you so much for writing this for me--it was so vivid and perfect. ♥

[clair_de_lune]

Lincoln could have meant it. I haven't decided whether he's oblivious because such feelings are not the first thing coming to mind when thinking about your brother and he can't even imagine it; or whether he realizes what's going on, at least to some extent, but still won't totally cross that line. I lean toward the former, and either way, I love writing this take on the relationship, including the shame/guilt aspect, even if sometimes, it takes some willpower not to take things further :-p

I'm so glad you liked it. Thank you, and happy birthday once again!

[tuesdaeschild]

You painted such lovely portrait of needy!Michael here and I believe if the muse gave you second person in the opening lines then that's the voice in which it had to be written! It certainly sounds right.

And one can only imagine the torment Michael goes through...or one could write the fic in the first person!! ;)

[clair_de_lune]

As I say just above, I don't know exactly what Lincoln gets from Michael's behavior but, in my mind, he won't act on it anyway. Poor Michael is totally doomed here!

or one could write the fic in the first person!! ;)

One could... How is your muse, by the way? Does he like first person's POV? *g*
Actually, when I use the second person in a fic, I see/read it like the main character talking to himself or herself, so I sort of did write the fic in the first person ;)

*hugs*

[tuesdaeschild]

I agree with your suggestion to the Birthday Girl that Lincoln is probably oblivious to how Michael is really feeling and maybe he believes Michael just wants big brotherly affection. And even if he did know about how Michael felt I doubt he would actually act on it either.

My muse is being uncooperative again. *glares disgustedly at muse* Although he does like first person POV and he even got me to open a Word document with the working title Michael's Longing...then he went back to sleep. *snarls at temperamental muse*

I suppose I do see/read the main character talking to himself in a second person POV; or maybe it's that little internal voice that we all have...pretty much the same thing, really! So I suppose you did write the fic in the first person!! ;D

*hugs*

[clair_de_lune]

Lincoln is probably oblivious to how Michael is really feeling and maybe he believes Michael just wants big brotherly affection

This calls for fic with Lincoln being all big brotherly and sincere about it, and Michael fighting inappropriate longings and reactions ;)

[filthy_bunny]

Utterly gorgeous, as always. I love (and envy!) your ability to say so much in relatively few words. And to make it so sensual without any actual contact taking place.

My favourite line:
heart beating wildly, wildly, wildly; always wildly for Linc.
Love it. <3

I think the second person works perfectly, because I can imagine it's all the things Michael is saying to himself. To no avail, of course. ;)

[clair_de_lune]

Thank you so much *hugs*

say so much in relatively few words

I'm going to keep that phrase somewhere handy and copy & paste when Foxy and I joke about my tendency to 'fatten' my fics *g* Seriously, though: sometimes, I do fatten them, and sometimes I barely edit them and manage to keep them short and 'crisp', which is hopefully the case here.

I think the second person works perfectly, because I can imagine it's all the things Michael is saying to himself.

*nods* This is exactly how I see the second person's voice, whether I write or read it. I used it for another series of fics, Blue Moon Nights, and it was already the case. I'm not sure if some people read it as someone else takling to the character? Not the way I read it anyway.

To no avail, of course. ;)
Of course. Poor Michael ;)

Thanks for reading and for the kind feedback!

[tuesdaeschild]

I'm going to keep that phrase somewhere handy and copy & paste when Foxy and I joke about my tendency to 'fatten' my fics *g*

I'll be looking out for it!! ;)

[dearpeterxoneal]

You captured Michael perfectly; the yearning, the shame, the
hope. And you kept me wondering: would Linc need Michael in the same way? Lovely job. *saves to mems*

[clair_de_lune]

Poor Michael is a in turmoil of emotions here, and I enjoyed way too much writing him so tortured. Glad it worked for you!
I wonder too about Lincoln, at least in this fic. I'd tend to think he doesn't realize what Michae is going through, but you never know...

Thank your for reading and for the nice comment :D