FIC: A Broken Chord (R/S, 1/1)

[cindergal]

Title: A Broken Chord
Author: cindergal
Team: AU
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: none
Genre(s): Fluff/Romance, Angst
Word Count: 1960
Summary: No one he knows even likes jazz, so it's not a place any of them would likely frequent. And that, of course, is its main attraction. At first.
Notes: Non-magical AU. Many thanks to ceallaigh_hk for her help with the

Comments

[sleeper6]

This is so wonderful. I like how instant their attraction could be. Poor Sirius, though--even in AUs, he still has to deal with his family.

Such a lovely read.

[cindergal]

Thank you so much! I'm very glad you liked it. And yes, I think Sirius' family issues really shaped him as a person. Poor boy. :-)

[brighty18]

Excellent! I can finally make a public comment about how much I enjoyed this piece.

I really loved how you not only used the prompt well, but how the idea of jazz pretty much permeated the whole piece. It has the lovely, free-form structure to it, but still had a definite narrative arc. Does that make sense? What I mean to say is that jazz itself gives the impression of being entirely improvisational, but, when studied, has a definite structure to it and this story felt the same. That's fantastic, btw.

He moves to a table and waits there as Remus steps out from behind the bar to join him. The music swirls around them, all broken chords and improvisational rhythms. Nothing is expected, but it’s beautiful just the same.
That really sums it all up, does it not?

Oh, and I may end-up as a bartender, myself, so this especially resonated for me.

This was really wonderful!

[cindergal]

Thank you so much! It makes me very happy that you think the piece felt like jazz, as that was exactly what I was going for.

Your comment made my day. :-)

[ljs]

Really lovely fic, with the shocker twist 2/3 through and the way the two of them link together.

[cindergal]

Thanks so much for reading, L, and for your kind words. :-)

[slaymesoftly]

Lovely finished product.

[cindergal]

Thanks again for your help!

[sirius_luva]

This was sweet and sad and beautiful, and the last line was PERFECT. <3

[cindergal]

Thanks very much! So glad you liked the last line. :-)