Fic: 5:02 P.M.

[cinderbella333]

Title: 5:02 P.M.

by Musedepandora (see: Master List of FanficsDisclaimer: Doctor Who belongs to various persons and corporations that are not me or associated with me. This piece of fanfiction is written with the admiration and respect for the original work. I claim no ownership of Doctor Who's creations. No profit is made from this material, now

Comments

[owlsie]

Yay you posted it <3

[cinderbella333]

Thank you for encouraging me. :D

[cassi0pei4]

How did you manage to do so much with so few words? Clearly, you are just that awesome.

I love how you used the action of checking her watch to set the tone of the piece. One would think that if time passed the only reason to check your watch would be to see if time has righted itself; River checks her watch to make sure that it hasn't. That's a really beautiful way to get at River's anxiety, because everyone reading this has probably experience a moment when they kept checking their watches anxiously and this piece funnels that memory of anxiety into River's actions. <3

[cinderbella333]

Wow, what fantastic feedback!

"That's a really beautiful way to get at River's anxiety, because everyone reading this has probably experience a moment when they kept checking their watches anxiously and this piece funnels that memory of anxiety into River's actions. <3" That is exactly what I was aiming for with this piece, so I was thrilled to read you felt that

[trialia]

Love ♥

[cinderbella333]

Thank you very much!

[promethia_tenk]

So, I live an hour and a half from Gettysburg and I know people who do Civil War reenactments. Whaddaya suppose my chances are of getting a movie made of The South vs. Dinosaurs? "General Pickett! Velociraptors approaching on all fronts!" "Arm the laser cannons!" =D

This was delightful! I love that crazy little AU, and you've filled in some of the details wonderfully. Particularly love her line to Cleopatra. And basically, "word" to everyting Cassiopeia said too.

[cinderbella333]

LOL! That would totally sell. A la Lincoln, Vampire Hunter. If you do it, please let me in on the project?

I'm so happy that you enjoyed this and liked how I filled in the details of this AU. I wanted to embrace the craziness of this everything-happening-at-once concept. Like the Confederate soldiers with the pterodactyls. I wanted something specifically American while still evoking the familiar from that opening scene. Also, really glad you liked River's line to Cleo. That was the line that inspired this whole thing. You've seen the sketch Owlsie did of Cleo and River. He said that he imagined River had just said something to Cleo to give her that deer-in-the-headlights look. And I came up with that line and the gun play and Owlsie told me to write it, thus this story.

Thank you for reading and leaving me a comment!

[elisi]

Mmmmmm. Time, time, time. And River. Love it.

(Brain sort of dead, hence less than coherent feedback. But this was just lovely.)

[cinderbella333]

No problem about the 'brain-dead' feeling. I've been in that place all month. I'm delighted that you enjoyed this. And if it left you with any feeling, I'm glad that it essentially boiled down to "Time, time, time. And River." That really is the essence of this story, after all. Thank you very much!