[HnG] I'll Take My Chances While You Take Your Time, R, Isumi/OFCs

[meiface]

Written for Round 12 of blind_go, I tried for something a little different from the norm in fandom. I thought it'd be different from what I usually wrote as well, but aside from character/pairing focus, I've realized it's much the same in theme and style. I'm not entirely sure how I feel about it - I like the story I'm trying to tell, but I'm not sure I'm

Comments

[forochel]

I quite like this! I like that nothing is really resolved in the end, the whole in-limbo-ness of Isumi, though he does kind of sort things out with Waya in the end. And also the whole, I don't know, self-contained quietness of Isumi's voice was very nice too. To your point about how you've told the story, though - I felt like, you kept on telling us Isumi was feeling kind of tetherless and didn't know what he was doing but your prose didn't really completely convey that sort of feeling. I don't know, but to get that sort of feeling I'd expect the prose to be more, um, claustrophobic? That might be how I'd write it. alskdjalsjg I don't know you probably don't even want all this rambling on about craft and whatnot.

[meiface]

I don't mind concrit! Sometimes the problem when I write is that even though I know I'm not happy with the way I told a story, I'm not sure how to fix it or change it. I honestly should start using betas more often for this kind of thing! It really depends on my mood, whether I feel like I'm producing a craft or if I feel like I'm just doing something fun as a hobby.

I think one problem I've been having lately with my writing is that I have stories in my head that would take 10k+ words to tell, but I struggle with writing things that long so I cut corners and trim the fic down to something manageable - but then it's not the full story. Idk. Writing is hard!

Thanks for the comment though! It makes me think~