Short Story: I Still Remember Her...

Feb 17, 2013 16:47

A/N: Because I've been horrifically negligent both in my journal and in posting any actual writing, here: have a short story I wrote from a prompt posted on Writeworld.

Sixty-five years ago today. The sun's disc hanging low in a weak yellow sky, the smell of heather soft, fragrant in the air. I remember it so well... )

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song_of_copper February 18 2013, 15:58:06 UTC
This is very good indeed, impressive! :-) I can quite imagine it as a short film, your words bring forth strong mental images. And I like how the ending leaves us wanting to know what happens next... :-)

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chibikelzafox February 20 2013, 15:18:48 UTC
Thanks! I love ambiguous/cliffhanger endings :D

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darkspirited1 February 23 2013, 19:17:38 UTC
Oh Man that was good. I loved the line about being pinned down by age and the ending.

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chibikelzafox February 25 2013, 11:51:37 UTC
Thanks very much :D

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