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chewableprose

CHEWYSTORIES Forgive me

Oct 24, 2010 22:09

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actor: taylor lautner, fandom: twilight, rating: pg, public, chewystories, actor: robert pattinson, slash manips, pairing: edward/jacob

Comments 27

tomboytoy October 24 2010, 15:47:18 UTC

Very Nice, love the atmosphere of it and how Jacob is all "look at me in the eyes" while Edward is at the same time all kind of "shameful"in front of Jacob and exhausted from pretending.

You can feel a real link between them in that one, Edward -for once- shows emotions and to me it appears it's actually the one you show someone you trust/love.

Great one, I think it's my favourite of you so fare because of your obivous dedicated work on it and also for the atmosphere you've been able to create there.

Can't wait to see the next one ;-)

chewableprose October 24 2010, 23:26:33 UTC

Wow, thanks Tom for the detailed feedback. I'm thrilled you like it so much, it makes it the time I put in so worthwhile. I'm starting to create the manips I had in mind when I began, so it's a good feeling, and I'm glad they seem to be working. Everything you read from the manip (from Jacob's determination to Edward's exhaustion was spot on what I was trying to convey). Here's hoping I'll create others that you like even more ;o). The next one will be up real soon :o).

tomboytoy October 25 2010, 07:57:23 UTC

Woohooo!! Do I get points for a good analysis of the manip? ;-p

And you're welcome about the feedback. I always like to receive a detailed one so it's only fair I try to do the same ;-)

chewableprose October 25 2010, 10:53:50 UTC

Hehe, you certainly do, major brownie points.

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starry_nights88 October 24 2010, 17:23:22 UTC

Jacob looks huge compared to Edward...it's kinda funny, but I liked the way the summary worked out. I can't wait to see how the story and manips progress further.

chewableprose October 24 2010, 23:28:27 UTC

Hehe, indeed, Jake certainly is a big boy (and I just love him for it, all that bulkiness). Glad you liked the summary and the direction in which the story is headed.

starry_nights88 October 25 2010, 01:58:33 UTC

The manip turned out really well. Ripped shirt and everything, that was a nice touch. Makes all the difference~

chewableprose October 25 2010, 03:12:43 UTC

So true, it's all about the little things. Thanks for noticing.

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madigirl210 October 24 2010, 22:33:14 UTC

Love it! So much emotion from both, just from the way they stand. Can't wait to see where the manips and story goes.

chewableprose October 24 2010, 23:32:55 UTC

Thanks heaps, this manip relies so much on emotion and body language to generate meaning, and I'm thrilled that came across. More soon.

olol123 November 1 2010, 18:00:07 UTC

I like that

chewableprose November 1 2010, 21:24:45 UTC

Thanks :)

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chewableprose January 13 2013, 09:19:10 UTC

Thank you. Their body language is so rich that I wanted to take advantage of that :).