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ch1ps0h0y

KHReborn 6918 - The Two Beyond Capture (WARNING: MA15+)

Jun 06, 2010 17:52

AUTHOR'S NOTE: So, I did warn you -- explicit adult content later on. This is my first such entry, so...if you're under 15, YOU SHOULD NOT BE READING THIS.

On that note, don't steal, don't upload etc. somewhere else, because I will find you. Apart from that: enjoy! >.>

The Two Beyond Capture - by ch1ps0h0y

( With a yawn... )

6918, khreborn, fanfiction

Comments 15

arisaswordheart June 6 2010, 08:10:58 UTC

OvO Ooh hoo. Nice job.
It's not as explicit as it could be, really. xD
Your writing is as good as always. :D
Reminds me that I should really use more synonyms...

ch1ps0h0y June 6 2010, 09:05:05 UTC

No, well, I did that deliberately I suppose. =.=" Not to mention I'm not exactly well-experienced in this kind of *ahem* thing.

You thought it was good? >.<" Thanks~ >.>"

arisaswordheart June 6 2010, 09:12:13 UTC

Are you sure? lol. Ahem.

:DD

ch1ps0h0y June 6 2010, 09:15:49 UTC

=.= *cough* Erm, do movies count? I don't mean porn movies, mind you. o_O"

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yamikakyuu June 27 2010, 08:39:18 UTC

Nice, I like that you get your point across without being explicit. Makes it more fun for the reader (imho). I also like the reference to Chrome since I also ship 1896 XD

ch1ps0h0y June 27 2010, 09:57:55 UTC

Ah, thank you. ^_^ That's what I think too. Plus I find it awkward to write REALLY explicitly.

I didn't intend for the 1896, but then this whole fandom is based on finding those sorts of hints. XD

rainbowfragment July 6 2010, 23:47:33 UTC

I will be honest... I despise 6918... that order doesn't make a lick of sense to me.

But that last line was all out adorable. I like. ^___^

Hibari is a tad too much on the sappy side for my liking here. But what can one do. (shrug)

But I also liked Mukuro's line of “It’s alright to show weakness sometimes, Kyoya.”

Although I am not sure if I would expect it from Mukuro or not... I know that if he did indeed say such a thing it is a more pot call the kettle black I would think, and less that he actually abides by it himself.

Those are just a few of my thoughts.

Cute. Keep it up!

And thank you for your efforts.

Sincerely,
Shinigami Twin 04
(Quatre Raberba Winner)

ch1ps0h0y July 7 2010, 01:23:44 UTC

First and foremost, thank you for your feedback! ^_^

I do agree Hibari is a bit too sappy, as you said. But then he is playing the uke here. :-/

Mukuro probably wouldn't say such a thing usually, but I thought since he's the 'seducer' here, if you will, it would be something he might say.

I'm glad that you liked parts of it, at least. :-) Again, thank you!

splashie_xyt July 18 2010, 11:23:22 UTC

Truthfully, I haven't read MukuHiba smut in ages. ^^" so I hopped over from the link on your ffn profile page. ^^ well, the smut wasn't that explict, I thought, but it was still satisfying? xD I don't even know what I'm saying *headdesk*

I really liked how the ficc ended though, the last bit was so sweet. ^^

ch1ps0h0y July 19 2010, 01:07:35 UTC

Mm, well, it was still enough to warrant a warning. ^_^"

Thank you! ^_^

splashie_xyt July 19 2010, 03:19:37 UTC

haha, true.

you're welcome. <3