Too Harsh?whobyfire78December 15 2008, 08:13:10 UTC
In a word...yes. I can definitely understand your anger at your cousin - it sounds like she always comes uninvited, is disrespectful of your home when she is there, and lets her kid run around undisciplined. I would be pissed too. But even if you think she deserves a good smack down, I'd try to avoid adding fuel to the drama fire.
The last paragraph is just downright mean. I would scratch that entirely - it's not needed to make your point and, frankly, only makes you come off as an asshole (which I don't think you are). Also, try to leave out the part where you claim she's living vicariously through you and your success, and that she's a parasite with nothing to offer you. These things may be true, but I don't think they're necessary to get your point across. The only purpose served by using that language is that you'll up the drama factor fivefold
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The last paragraph is just downright mean. I would scratch that entirely - it's not needed to make your point and, frankly, only makes you come off as an asshole (which I don't think you are). Also, try to leave out the part where you claim she's living vicariously through you and your success, and that she's a parasite with nothing to offer you. These things may be true, but I don't think they're necessary to get your point across. The only purpose served by using that language is that you'll up the drama factor fivefold ( ... )
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