Bleach - Love Me

[ceres_wish]

Fandom: Bleach
Title: Love Me
Rating: PG - 15
Pairing: Urahara/Ichigo
Warning: Angst

Summary: What existed between them wasn't love, and that was supposed to be just fine. They were just two torn souls trying to heal. So why did Ichigo suddenly feel like this wasn't enough anymore? Written for

Comments

[meiroh]

I definitely like it ; it's angst, but not deep despair and you let the hope at the end.
But i was slightly disturbed by the "Ichigo knew" at the beginning : to me, when you write in italics, it's because you write the thoughts themselves, from inside the mind, so the name of the boy sounded awkwardly to me. Personally, i would even have used the "I" and the present tense, to make the thoughts more "alive"... But i'm aware that i'm not the writer here and you have another style ;)
Yet, the "ichigo" still disturbs me a bit... What do you think about it ?

[ceres_wish]

Actually, i thought of this as well. I'm writing this from a third person's point of view. Do you think it'd be better if i were to put "he" instead?

[meiroh]

Writing "he" instead of "ichigo" would definitely look better to me ;)
For the pov, i don't think that squeezing the thoughts at the first person would chock, but the third is good too.
If you use "he", though, it will be better to let it at a past tense (i think that's what you had on mind anyway ^^)

[ceres_wish]

Thanks so much for the suggestion *goes correct it*

And of course, thanks for commenting too, it meant a lot to me ^^

[elleipsis]

This is beautiful...I don;t know, its bitter and full of angst, and not fluffy at all, but its still so beautiful.
I like the italics of the thoughts, and they way that you write it, that they are just comforting each other.
I also love the change from loving him, to being in love with him.
Thanks so much for writing ^_^

[ceres_wish]

Thank you for the lovely comment!! Normally it's easier to write this pairing in a comedic aspect than angst, so i'm glad you enjoy this! ^^

[conjure_lass]

*wibble wibble*

Oh that was so good!! It was the perfect thing to wake up to on a lazy day off!

There is, I must say, a difference between loving someone and being "in love" with them...i'm glad Ichigo noticed the difference. *sigh* Absolutely wonderful.

Oh! I caught a grammar error too...

"He used to loved Kisuke like he loved those around him; his family, his friends"

I assume it should be "He used to *love* Kisuke"? Your spellcheck didn't catch it because its not spelled incorrectly.

[ceres_wish]

Thanks for the lovely comment!! Ah, it's good to have a day off to enjoy the goodness of Ura/Ichi!!

Yep, i notice the difference myself after reading Eclipse by Stephenie Meyer ^^

Argh! Grammar! Thanks for the heads-up *goes correct it*

By the way, luv your icon!! ^^

[fishingforboots]

*sigh* So nice. I'm glad I finally decided to read it. <.< >.>

Of course, I imagine Urahara loved him at least somewhat from the beginning, and was waiting to see what Ichigo would find with him...

...But I can't know for sure unless you say what happens! D:

[ceres_wish]

Thank you!! I normally write this pairing from a comedic aspect, so i'm glad you enjoy this angsty piece.

Well, if you want to know, Urahara did love and care for him but he wasn't IN LOVE with him. But that can now chnage since Ichigo finally confront his feelings ^^

[annieroo2]

This was so lovely. The angst even helped pull the story along and give it depth.

I loved Ichigo's realization of being in love. It really is an amazing and terrifying thing when the change dawns on you and you aren't sure how the other feels.

I liked the hope at the end. I'm going to pretend that Kisuke has just been waiting to declare his love for Ichigo for a time when he knew it wouldn't terrify the boy. :D

Hope this goes a long way to destroying that writers block of yours.

[ceres_wish]

Thank you!! I'm more used to writing this pairing from a comedic aspect, so i wasn't sure how this will turn out!

Yes, i feel it's amazing to realize that loving a person and being in love with him is a totally different thing.

Haha, pretend all you like, I'll leave Kisuke's feelings free for readers to interpret ^^

Yeah, i hope so too! ^_____^