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inbehindbars October 15 2005, 17:06:03 UTC
Is this for a common app?

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cb201 October 15 2005, 17:15:45 UTC
Yep.

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inbehindbars October 16 2005, 15:57:15 UTC
Is it short?

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cb201 October 16 2005, 18:40:29 UTC
I don't think so. The common app website says 250-500, this is around 300.

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electrius October 15 2005, 20:11:07 UTC
You can combine the first two sentences of the first two paragraphs. Obviously, it has to be 250-500 words -- it looks short to me, but I can't count words automagically. Even if it within range, think about making it longer with more detail. "The phrase sth. applies to s.o." is an educationism, don't use it. Don't have a parenthetical paragraph; combine it with the previous paragraph. Give a little bit of biography somewhere in there. That's it for what I have to say.

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dadams1 October 15 2005, 21:10:30 UTC
I like it. Maybe if you could add something to it less about describing you to make it more... a sample of your writing ability as well (because you are a good writer). Remember: show, don't tell. Then, perfect.

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