Comments | causeways: [original fiction] Zodiac, by Dixie Walters

causeways

[original fiction] Zodiac, by Dixie Walters

May 21, 2009 00:27

I intended to go to bed a while ago, but instead got caught up in archiving a relic of true genius. Maybe it's in honor of my new and rather ridiculous love for Star Trek, but ladies and gentlemen, I give you a work of science fiction goodness by me, age nine. And by me obviously I mean Dixie Walters, because that was my pen name. Oh yes ( Read more... )

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causeways May 22 2009, 05:25:50 UTC

I also used to organize very elaborate games for my brothers to play. The joys of having younger siblings!

fourfreedoms May 21 2009, 04:47:37 UTC

oh, I do just love to gaze into the lens and look at Earth, on the way other side of the universe, and see how stupid the people on it are

*snorting with laughter*

This is so amazing. Trust me, this is way better than anything I wrote at that age. All my stories were basically just listings of things I wanted.

causeways May 22 2009, 05:27:44 UTC

I think my favorite bit might be the paragraph where I very clearly paused and was like IT IS TIME FOR WORLDBUILDING NOW and wrote about all of the super cool worldbuilding things I'd thought up. Collapsible houses! I knew about that shit LONG before J.K. Rowling and her tents.

My other favorite part is where I give the passcode to get into the house. Because the reader TOTALLY needs to know that!

subterrain May 21 2009, 12:36:25 UTC

Oh my god, this is hilarious and adorable. I love that scifi means basically just making up words. Cymbly! And recipes for excellent asphalt landing pads! Obvs, Karita should be selling her family's innovations to Starfleet.

Also, the substitution of days for half hour increments really lends a sense of urgency. :> :> :>

This is so great - you had a lot of perseverance as a kid. My stories never made it past a page or two. This totally brightened my morning.

causeways May 22 2009, 05:30:09 UTC

I should have mentioned in the entry itself that what this was born of was a book by National Geographic called The Universe, which was huge and hardcover and had really rockin' glossy pictures of planets. It also had a section about what aliens might look like which I was all kinds of stupidly obsessed with. I do not remember this for sure, but I can pretty well guarantee that I wrote this entire story with that book no more than two feet away from me.

The reason I think this, other than that I know how obsessed I was with that book? It seems deeply unlikely that I would know (Ultrasonic sound is 20,000 Hz or above.) by heart.

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causeways May 22 2009, 05:31:51 UTC

Haha! Semicolons weren't my vice. As evidenced by this story, I'm pretty sure that overuse of "raced," "yelled," and "gulped" was my problem. Heh.

valiant May 21 2009, 18:34:23 UTC

This is pretty intensive and imaginative :D As a kid, I wrote historical fiction, but otherwise it reminds me a lot of my authorial voice back then as well, only mine was not as good, haha!! Cymbly is also too cute. I want to start referring to my kitchen as the cymbly.

causeways May 22 2009, 05:33:30 UTC

I was such an authoritative little snot, though! Look at me being all "haha, humans are stupid" at age NINE while writing about aliens who apparently have TAILS.

It's really too bad that I got bored before writing the rest of this story. Clearly at age nine I thought this was going to be an EPIC, because the original copy of this has the number one for Chapter One drawn huge, like CHAPTER ONE OF MANY.