Comments | cathiexx: [original fic] forget about the better man

cathiexx

[original fic] forget about the better man

May 26, 2007 22:40

title: forget about the better man
author: cathiexx
ratings/warning: r. violence. sex. rock ‘n roll.
word count: 948
author’s notes: first attempt at original fic. for challenge .002 at unabridgedsalon. scary. ♥

( forget about the better man )

fic, fic: original

Comments 12

synecdoche May 26 2007, 13:19:15 UTC

Oh my goodness, Cath, I love this. So much.

I love the way the whole story gives off this trapped feeling -- the way Amanda's caught between the idea she has of love (especially with Ryan), and the way you can see how she almost realizes how she should leave.
The itemized list? Loved it. Also the way you ask questions, especially in the "silver eyes" part.
And the history at the beginning was for the win. I love backstory, so this was fantastic for me.

So basically, you writing original fic makes my day a thousand times better. I loved this bunches and bunches of bunches! ♥ ♥ ♥

cathiexx May 27 2007, 05:21:56 UTC

awww, rach. thanks so so much, darling. you have no idea how happy this makes me. especially because your original fics have been so awesome.

i've been playing with this idea for a while, because i think a situation like this is so grey and not at all black and white. it's not 'well he hits her and she's stupid for staying' -- there's so much more to it than that. i think i could have written alot more to this, but i just sort of wanted to get it out there. lol.

♥ thanks again sweetness.

teenwitch77 May 26 2007, 13:46:53 UTC

Wow.

Cath, this is amazing. Her attachment to him is so disturbing and yet so idealistic and naive, which is what makes it so tragic. I just... love it. I'm having trouble with coherent thoughts right now I think, but I really like the format, and I think the last line just... stays with you. Like the best fiction does.

Wonderful work. Going into my memories.

cathiexx May 27 2007, 05:27:09 UTC

em! ♥ thank you so much gorgeous. it means alot, really. original fic is a lot scarier to put out there, isn't it? so honestly, it's so lovely to get such lovely words from you. i appreciate it. and am so glad it worked for you.

<3 <3 <3

thewlisian_afer May 26 2007, 16:20:38 UTC

Wooooooow. Wonderful in a deeply disturbing way. It's... Nngh. I want to give this a glowing paragraphs-long review describing every little detail of why I liked it, but I can't get past the squeeful flailing feeling. XD I'll definitely be reading any further original fic that you post. ♥

cathiexx May 27 2007, 05:29:04 UTC

eeek! thank you SO much darling. i really appeciate it. no, really. i'm just smiling so much right now. it means alot. original stuff is a bit harder and scarier to share with everyone, so it's so nice to hear people say nice things about it. ♥

and yay! hopefully i'll be writing more soonish. it's a fun experience! a challenge.

missymeggins May 27 2007, 00:52:19 UTC

Wow. Cath, this is incredible. You've seriously captured the mentality of abuse victims SO well. The belief that it's love, the need she has to cling to him despite his abuse. It's so dark and disturbing and real. That's what makes it so powerful.

Write more original fic! ♥

cathiexx May 27 2007, 15:08:08 UTC

thanks so much megs! so glad you enjoyed it. it's scary stuff, putting original work out there. and your lovely, lovely words have just made me so happy. ♥ i'm so glad it worked for you sweetie, and that enjoyed it.

and haha, i'm sure i will! thanks!

fated_addiction May 27 2007, 05:27:52 UTC

this hurts.

i mean, god, cathie. babe, this hurts so much. i think, really, as a woman it's facing that situation that you say that you'll never be in. but god, the gripping part, especially rising into our 20s, is that it's potentially possible.

everything, every detail, every moment-- god, it's all so beautifully done. suffocating. i really feel like crying. the sex is so chilling, marking cyclic, and babe--

this is a rambling review, sure, but this is so brilliant.

well done, you.

cathiexx May 27 2007, 15:10:41 UTC

oh, chrissy. thank you.

i've thought about this one for a while now. and.. i wanted to get it right. or at least semi-right. i almost wanted to write more, but i wanted to keep it clean and simple as well, you know? and nghghghg, to know that you think it worked and hurt, well, it kind of blows me away.

thanks so much darling. ♥ so glad you enjoyed.