counterpoint; chapter two.

[casi_casi]

Title: Counterpoint
Chapter: 2 of 4
Characters: David Silva / David Villa; Sergio Ramos / Fernando Torres; Steven Gerrard / Xabi Alonso
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: Lies.
Notes: AU. A story told out of time in twelve parts; here are the next three. Many, many thanks to all who read and commented on the first chapter.
Feedback > life. Constructive

Comments

[notoriousjk]

Given what we saw of Fernando and Villa in the 1st chapter, these characterizations make so much sense. I feel like I'm getting to know every single character so very well & I'm simply in love w/this Villa/Silva.

I know I keep harping on about the characterization, but really, I only do it because it is so amazing & fully formed characters are so important to me in fic.

Looking forward to more.

[casi_casi]

Ohh, thank you so much! That's really great to hear, as I'm trying to focus on characterisation more than anything else. :)

[influira]

wow, fuck, i just love this so much. i love how you show us their different personalities with each chapter alskfjaslkjgalksjfkl

okay the stevie/xabi is like, breaking my heart. omfg i like. ALSKDJFLKAGJKLSFlahksjfdal.

well, no, all of them are breaking my heart. but in different ways. this is just so fucking good.

i'm in love with your sergio. lkafsj hahahahahaha. i just love the sergio/fernando in general, ahhh. and like. ahhhHHHHHHHHH VILLA. I WNATED TO QUOTE ALL THIS PARTS. jk i wanted to quote the whole fucking fic, this is so fucking good, i'm like. obsessed. i could read this forever. i spazzed out when i saw you posted aldksfalshahahah i love it.

[casi_casi]

Oh, I'm so, so glad to hear that. Thank you so much. It's so wonderful to get this kind of feedback. ♥

[katie_andrea]

i only read the first two coz my brains gonna explode for a 3rd one, really, i had to consult Merriam Webster at times

[casi_casi]

Oh, I hope that's a good kind of brain explosion.

Thank you so much for reading and for this incredibly thorough comment! I really appreciate the feedback; it gives me an idea of what I'm doing right and what I flesh out. Thank you, genuinely. I'm so glad you're liking the characters and relationship dynamics.

[lullaby9]

I'm in looooooooooove with your writing (lmao you probably have read this from me before). Since the becksillas one you have me in your hand, haha. I think I love that one more than any SeX fic and that's saying a lot since they're my otp &hearts. :3

I don't understand Xabi, well I do, kind of. I guess it's confusing and overwhelming for him, it's like, he has created an image of Stevie where he knows him so well, he knows what he likes, what he does, but from nowhere there's this new person he just barely knows even tho he has known him for ages. It breaks the balance, the routine he's been following, that's what I think he is afraid of. Of not knowing how to deal of the new things that are coming in such an abrupt way. Well I think. xDD

Sorry, I can't tell about the other two pairings, I'm just reading stevie/xabi. :3

[casi_casi]

Oh, thank you! That's so indescribably nice.

I'm so glad you're liking the Stevie/Xabi in this. Your feedback is great to read.

[emotivelanguage]

The way you write characters is amazing!! So complete and believable!!!
I love this fic and can't wait for more =]

(sorry for the super lame comment, I really tired)

[casi_casi]

Ohh, not a lame comment at all. On the contrary, very generous. Thank you so very much. ♥