This was brilliant! And breaking it up really didn't interupt the flow any at all. The situation that brought them together was marvelous, and I love how you kept them held off from each other, veiling the conversation as a business proposal right to the end. And Hot. Very nicely Hot. Ending perfectly, though I have to admit I wouldn't mind (understatement) seeing more in this vein if the muse ever struck you again. :D
"Nasty, evil business man, taking advantage of a sweet, inebriated young hero. I feel I should grow a moustache, if only to be able to twirl the ends of it while laughing sinisterly."
Hehehe, that was by far my favourite line. This was amazing. I loved it!
Wow, what a treat! I really liked this one. The ending is great, lets people be imaginative. I thought it was really true to the characters as well. Wow, oh wow, I really liked it.
Hey, just wanted to let you know I wrote something at erised_diaries. It's PG-13 but I'm working on some other stuff. One is almost done and is pretty nice - the other is short and smutty. Will post both, at least to my own journal. Heh heh.
But the PG-13 one is there if you need something to read.
wow, what can I say. Great fic, you have an amazing talent to build suspension! The last scene was the best, I just loved it. I am still reeling from it! Thank you so much for giving me such a wonderful little(but long) story to read, with my favourite pairing. *hugs*thank you!! -ash
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Hehehe, that was by far my favourite line. This was amazing. I loved it!
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But the PG-13 one is there if you need something to read.
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*hugs*thank you!!
-ash
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*in a good way*
*hee. <3*
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