Comments | carson_michael: Short Fic Thing

ametrine0012 in carson_michael

Short Fic Thing

Aug 13, 2008 14:43

Carson stretched and yawned, his sleepy brain coming into focus. He rolled over, and not surprisingly, discovered he was alone. Michael in his not quite wraith and not quite human form required little sleep, if any. Carson was flattered that his lover would lie with him until the human fell asleep. He knew that Michael had plenty of ( Read more... )

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ametrine0012 August 14 2008, 06:55:24 UTC

ohh, thankyou. *blushes at praise*

jya_bd_cp_ttgb August 14 2008, 01:57:18 UTC

I've been blamed for fic!!

I am pleased with fic.

You can blame me for more if you want to. *evil grin*

ametrine0012 August 14 2008, 06:56:42 UTC

glad u are pleased with blamed fic. give me more prompts in the future and i will blame u for more fics... *returns evil grin*

garneteve August 14 2008, 02:15:12 UTC

ooo nice...nice and kinda dark, what with the history michael gave carson. I'd love to read more about the er, 'bedroom' scene...very nicely done.

ametrine0012 August 14 2008, 06:58:22 UTC

By request, I have added smut. I didn't feel like writing smut earlier, but I made myself do it. (Cause I know how much is sucks to read a fic for smut and to find no smut in said fic.)
The SMUT is all your fault. *smiles*

garneteve August 14 2008, 07:51:41 UTC

OOOOoooooOOOO
I happily take all the blame for any Carson/Michael smut that may be led to on anything dear...*evil grins*
**hugs** thankyou!!

suryaofvulcan August 14 2008, 16:02:14 UTC

There really isn't enough Carson/Michael around, so I'm glad you wrote this. It was a interesting idea.

Now I'm going to be nitpicky. His name is MICHAEL, not Micheal. I understand that typos happen now and again, but this is a consistent error throughout your story.

And '...white streams of seaman covering their chests...' really cracked me up. The word you're looking for is SEMEN.

And the sex scene didn't really work for me - I preferred it without.

Otherwise, interesting story.

~S~

ametrine0012 August 14 2008, 18:56:25 UTC

whoops, I have been caught. Thankyou, my beta isn't this far in the series yet, would help if I would loan her season 3 long enough for her to watch it. and now u see why i don't write smut, as much as i love to read it. thanks again for the input, see anything else, let me know.

suryaofvulcan August 14 2008, 20:33:38 UTC

Oh, I wasn't asking you to change it again - just urging you not to second-guess yourself, I suppose. It's your story - end it in whatever way you want.

~S~

ametrine0012 August 15 2008, 18:23:44 UTC

nope, problem solved now. and ever since u pointed out the "seman" thing, i have been picturing a hoard of little men in white sailor uniforms running around on Carson's chest. I did like it better the smut free way, but since i wrote it both ways, and had the one i liked less posted, i decided to solve the problem with two stories. now all is well.