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carmine_pink

[one-shot] I Knew I Loved You

Oct 04, 2011 23:25

Title: I Knew I Loved You
Type: One-shot
Word count: 6,106
Rating: PG-13
Pairing: Koyama/Yamapi
Summary: “I think I dreamed you into life.” AU.
Notes: Based on the Savage Garden song of the same title. Written for reel_johnny's mini-reel challenge, first posted here. Thanks to

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Comments 8

jeanngriffin October 7 2011, 03:35:11 UTC

wow nice fic ^^ thanks for sharing

Still... Yamapi will be the young master ne ^^ he's really got that image.
It's quite cute Yamapi easily got jealous just because Kei-chan said one name (Shige) on his phone ^.*~~~~

I'm imagine how the story goes after that... but it'll be great if you continue it .^-^.

carmine_pink October 7 2011, 09:38:14 UTC

He's got a 'masterly' air about him, huh? XD

I totally ninja-ed in a little bit of KoyaShige there, LOL.

Right now I have no plans for a sequel, but thanks for the suggestion. I'm glad you liked this! <3

snow_meow October 8 2011, 15:06:47 UTC

I like this fic and the way your wrote it.

The storyline is most interesting.

A sequel would be good.

carmine_pink October 9 2011, 03:45:30 UTC

I'm happy you liked it! Right now I have no plans for a sequel especially in the light of what's going on in fandom... I still feel weird about all this. But thanks for reading and commenting. :)

rietje_1 October 12 2011, 22:23:59 UTC

I've been meaning to comment on this, but with the recent news, I decided to wait for a bit. I didn't want to make some bad feelings resurface, especially with some of the pairings.

But this was just... fantastic. The idea of two stories in one and the different flow to them in particular. ♥ I like the cultural flavour of it, the drama feel, and how it all connected to present time. And of course the growing desperation, Yamapi clinging onto the past life experiences. ;_; That made me even more rooting for a second chance. And Ryo's not-so-subtle interpretation of Yamapi's dreams made me laugh. No, he really isn't one for heart-to-hearts, haha. But yes, I really enjoy and appreciate a couple of lighter moments in between all the angst/serious. (And the other way around, actually.)

"Sometimes he wears a short-sleeved shirt that reveals his toned arms, and when it’s his stop he stands up and grabs the handrail, muscles flexing, and Yamashita notices more than a few people staring apart from himself."Haha of course they would ( ... )

carmine_pink October 13 2011, 07:47:12 UTC

It's totally okay! <3 I try to think of fic universes and the real people as separate despite the thin line dividing them due to the use of real people in fanfiction. More so after the recent developments, because I still do have hard feelings... but this fic is AU so in itself it's a bit farther detached from reality than canon fics.

That said, I'm really proud of this fic so I'm glad you liked it. :) I struggled to finish this before the deadline of the challenge. Funny how I originally planned it to be a short and simple fic inspired by a music video, but then the storyline of the past totally won me over so I expanded it a bit. Hence I had to expand the present events as well in order to keep the balance... and what I intended to be 2,000 words ended up as 6,000. XD The lighter moments were fun to write, too.

Not awkward timing at all, don't worry. I always love reading your comments, so thank you! <3

rietje_1 October 13 2011, 22:42:27 UTC

Ah, okay. Thanks, I'm glad to hear your opinion on it and that it's not too soon. The recent events stirred up a lot, I get that some people need a little more time to let it all sink in. And I think detachment is good? That's pretty much how I read them as well - stories based on their idol personality.

Wow. Honestly, I can't tell you had a hard time finishing this/had to rush. Haha, three times longer than intended, but I liked the expansion and it didn't feel long?

carmine_pink October 14 2011, 01:57:55 UTC

Detachment is necessary so we all don't take fics too seriously, LOL. Especially in times like this, I think I need to remind myself of it more. I still have stories I want to write that have Pi and Ryo in them. It might take time but I still want to write them.

LOL, it's not that long but definitely longer than I thought. Adklskdjdxfs I'm glad you didn't think it felt rushed, because... I was totally rushing it by the end. I stayed up all night and morning and finished it at around 7 AM. sanjihan told me, "Go to sleep already!" XD