Before she knew it, he’d leapt forward, his long fingers skirting the lines of her wispy newborn Patronus, eyebrows raised and knowing blue eyes locked immovable on her; and for a minute, she didn’t know(she never really knew, around him, but that was alright now) if he’d tease, or lament, or laugh, or maybe(and she’d take what he gave, she would), cry.
And then he jerked his wand determinedly, yelled a harsh Expecto Patronum, like he was defying the spell-ruined classroom and the bloodied stones below; and suddenly, she was trying(rapidly failing) not to let go of the laughter(and the sobs, and the grief, and the gladness, and always, the love) that was unraveling along with his silvery, unformed guardian in the too-cold air.
The war, it was over, and they let the phantoms of what had been their joy dance around them, hand grasping spell-worn hand and promising without a word spoken-the next ones would burst free with the silver-bright certainty of who they both were...together.
You did? Yay! :D Yeah, I was thinking of a spell, any spell that would be perfectly 'ethereal' and then it just hit me, haha. And punctuation makes everything prettier, I say!
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And then he jerked his wand determinedly, yelled a harsh Expecto Patronum, like he was defying the spell-ruined classroom and the bloodied stones below; and suddenly, she was trying(rapidly failing) not to let go of the laughter(and the sobs, and the grief, and the gladness, and always, the love) that was unraveling along with his silvery, unformed guardian in the too-cold air.
The war, it was over, and they let the phantoms of what had been their joy dance around them, hand grasping spell-worn hand and promising without a word spoken-the next ones would burst free with the silver-bright certainty of who they both were...together.
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(Woo, comma-happy! But I hoped you liked!)
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Yeah, I was thinking of a spell, any spell that would be perfectly 'ethereal' and then it just hit me, haha.
And punctuation makes everything prettier, I say!
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And yay parentheses!
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(...I think some of your style seeped into mine by osmosis. I usually put parentheses as a whole other paragraph. Like this.)
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