ff: number the days that are left (sawyer, kate)

[cantbesilent]

title: number the days that are left
characters: sawyer, kate; past sawyer/kate, implied past sawyer/juliet
word count: 758
summary: she’s never known what to say, and that’s the blank unfairness of it all
notes: i dislike this pairing with an intensity that remains unrivaled. i make no attempt to be nice to them. i do, however, try to be fair. much

Comments

[cantbesilent]

Thank you! I'm so glad and so grateful for the comment.

[angela_weber]

Yayyyyy! You already know how much I love this, but now I can really elaborate. :)

First off--your Sawyer is fantastic. He's so broken and crushed and crusty and so, so reminiscent of S1!Sawyer, only worse. His pain is so tangible. The way he thinks of Kate--that first paragraph--is seriously stunning, so beautifully written, the way she is everything he knows her to be and yet nothing like that at all. And the gun! GUH! That is so them and so perfect. It actually gave me chills. And here are a few excerpts that really popped out at me:

He rolls his head away from her, a deliberate and sinister movement, blocking out the sight of her pathetically concerned eyes, of her tied and tumbling hair. There’s a boulder in his gut, a dense and heavy pull on his limbs, and he can feel her stare, just like always, and the fierce burning in him is not anger, no - anger is too easy for her.

Your writing is so fluid here. I really admire it. And the emotional resonance is fantastic.

It’s not her voice he wants to hear. The thought of

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[cantbesilent]

aefjskghsefjigjsdjflk THANK YOUUUUUU. You > World.

I am SO glad you liked that whole weird part about blood on his hands. I really, really felt it and really felt like it could fit with the kind of destroyed, alone, grief striken Sawyer who may feel very resentful, but at the same time it's kinda intense and violent. But I so wanted it to work so YAY that you think it did. I'm just really twistedly obsessed with broken withdrawn post-Juliet Sawyer. I'm just like, if they're gonna kill one half of the OTP I might as well get some good angsty grief out of the other half, right? I kind of really need that for my sanity, lol.

I'm really blown away by such great feedback. If you like it then I know it's worth something. I really felt like this was a risk for me, but I'm pleased you think it paid off! Thanks so, so much!

[cantbesilent]

Thank you! I'm so glad and and very grateful to you for reading and taking the time to comment. Can't promise any more Skate, this may have very well been an odd little fluke, they're not my pair! But who knows!

[jam_min]

I really enjoyed reading this, you did a great job portraiting the characters, especially Sawyer . It was intense and painful and lovely.

[cantbesilent]

Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it and thanks so much for taking the time to comment!