*christens the new community*

[heine_sight]

New community, same disclaimers apply, non-members and applicants are always allowed to comment. ♥

EDIT: ... no, this is not the last batch. Biz and I make an announcement when we post the last batch. For reference! This is also what the voting FAQ is for; please, please read it. It saves you time and me a headache.

Remember!
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Comments

[not_an_otaku]

Again, avoided canons I wasn't sure of.

Ins - Nina, Rei

Outs - Zell, Aya, Lina

Feel free to ask for an explanation!

Lina's Apper

[not_an_otaku]

That's just depressing. One in, and they didn't even comment. ^^;

Anyhoo, might I have an explanation?

Thanks! ^^

Re: Lina's Apper

[not_an_otaku]

...and LJ eats my comment.

As I was saying, your app didn't sound like Lina at all. She's too calm for what's going on around her, and uh... she doesn't just use the gigaslave whenever she feels like it. ^^;; Fireball is something she'd usually use for random bandits/zombies, I'd say.

Rent the DVDs and try again na!

Zell's apper

[not_an_otaku]

Just wondering what improvements I can make.

[mcjunyi]

Outs to Aya, Syaoran, Lina, and Kalas.

I have a migraine and won't be able to concrit COHERENTLY, but I'll still give it my best shot if you'll bear with me. ♥

[nayami]

Only in tonight was Rei. I might come back to Lina, and Izumi because I liked some parts and I think my mood's affecting things.

Nina: This seems like a lot for a little girl to say. Nina didn't seem that vocal from what I saw. I think it's a voice issue here. Out.

Zell: A list does not an entry make for a first impression. But I can see potential in some things here and I think you might benefit from a change in style. Out.

Ran: Boring. Ran is a very matter-of-fact guy but he needs to live too. Out!

Kalas: I don't know your canon, but I can tell you that not knowing who your character was addressing bothered me immensely. Out!

Whichever other outs I didn't mentioned can ask if they want reasons.

[fake_alchemist]

Only one thing I can think to note...

Lina apper: Canon section, please.

[n_is_for]

Voted as harlecerule Bitch today, apparently! My outs were: Zell, Aya, Li, Lina, Nina, Kalas.

Zell: The list format didn't do it for me. If Zell started making a list, I'd think it'd stop being a list after maybe three points max - and that's if he tried to do a list at all.

Aya: Essentially, you and two other apps got an out from me for the same reason; your app didn't hold my attention well enough for me to be able to remember what happened at the start of the app by the time I got to the end.

Li: see: Aya

Lina: I'm afraid this just didn't sound like Lina to me at all. The spark wasn't there and, yeah, a ton of characterization issues which Momoko summed up nicely. (And I'm talking as someone who just put in the last TRY VHS two minutes ago to watch, having over the last few days viewed the both first season and TRY in a mostly-non-stop marathon, so Lina's really fresh in my mind right now

Nina apper

[n_is_for]

Heh, I understand- I felt positively dirty the whole time I was writing the app, but I thought that I could probably avoid the more innapropriate things (tentacle rape springs to mind) when playing as her.

I'm glad you thought it was well-written, though! ^^;