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[tiiiik]

Author: tiiiik
Title: Conversation
Rating: PG-13
Pairing/s: Gwaine/Merlin, Arthur/Gwen mentioned
Character/s: Gwaine, Merlin
Summary: It can't be one-way sort of conversation, as amazing as I am at those.
Warnings: Serious injury, but no descriptions
Word Count: ~500
Prompt: Surrender
Author's Notes: I think I should also warn for general incoherency...

Comments

[jelazakazone]

I am amused. I think drabbles and short pieces are the perfect place to play with things and should be encouraged. I have no idea what is going on, but I was pretty sure very early on that the conversation was between Gwaine and Merlin and you've got their voices pretty spot on.

Oops, I should add that I liked this and could understand the conversation even if I didn't understand what was happening physically. I kind of liked that, actually. Dialogue only is very interesting to play with.

[tiiiik]

Haha, thank you! And yes, drabble is amazing for that sort of thing, not to mention that I feel safer trying it short first.

I'm glad you liked it despite the confusion!

[alby_mangroves]

I really like the way you wrote this, I liked the disjoined thoughts, but I'm negl, I was confused about what was actually happening, and whether it was Gwaine or Merlin who was injured. I read it a couple of times, and on a re-read it works really well for me, once I settled on it being Merlin (I think what threw me was the mention of Merlin wrapping Gwaine up, at which point I thought... hang on. I thought it was Gwaine who was tending to Merlin, and I know I'm rambling, sorry!!) I thought this was great:

"I'd think he does it on purpose, to make you look worse than you could for all those that'd-- without even thinking twice, I swear that I wouldn’t think once--

Red is-- red is really not your color, I can’t--"

As I said, I really like the way you wrote the disjointed, distressed thoughts and the way he was talking, it came through that he's upset and rambling and just needing everything to be all right. Thank you and well done!

[tiiiik]

No, don't worry about rambling, it's actually awesome to know how your thoughts went while reading it! So wow, thank you for taking your time to write this, it really gives me insight as to how it looks like outside of my head and it's pretty important to me.

[alby_mangroves]

In that case, you're welcome :D

[yenny2206]

I like it, I had to read it two times to get it but I like it. I love how writers can convey so much in so little words :)

[tiiiik]

Thank you very much, also for taking time to read it twice, aha :D

[hogwartsvixxxen]

Even though I'm a bit confused I liked the characterazation. It was a fun read ♥

[tiiiik]

I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thank you!

[hogwartsvixxxen]

♥ :) *hugs*

[waltzing_mice]

Very interesting read. I like when people try different things. But now I'm curious for more! :)

[tiiiik]

Who knows, maybe I'll write more! Or at least try to write this scene in normal narration, since I like the idea.

Thank you for the comment!