LJ Idol: Week 1 - Winding Up

[callistahogan]

“Are you serious?”

Three words, five syllables. They didn't seem like they would make much of an impact on anything. They were just three tiny words that I say several times on a normal day. I didn't mean anything by it: I was just a quiet teenage girl who didn't want two obnoxious little boys rampaging through the house, being loud and annoying

Comments

[imafarmgirl]

This definitely sounds like a hard situation.

[gaea_rising]

I hope you continue finding the reserves of patience you need to get through this part.

[amazingwriter23]

I remember feeling dragged to what felt like a lesser level because of family distractions and the pressure of feeling like you have to say "yes" even if you need to tell them, "no". AW

[phoenixejc]

This is very very well written! I love the way you build the anxiety through the piece. Nicely done!

[the_vernacular]

I really like the way you went back and forth, rhythmically, between prose and dialogue in this. It had a really nice tone and pace, beyond just telling your story.