FIC: Be Right Back (Clark Kent/Oliver Queen), Smallville

[calcus]

I'm a bit nervous about this honestly. It's unbeta'd but I have read through it several times so...anyway, here we go.

Title: Be Right Back
Author: Calcus
Characters/Pairings: Clark Kent/Oliver Queen
Word Count: 1588
Rating: PG, PG-13 at the most.
Warnings: Slash? That’s pretty much it. A little angst as well.
Spoilers: …None, I think.
Summary

Comments

[svgurl]

Aww, you had nothing to be nervous about! This was very good, though a bit sad. Poor Clark and Ollie ... forced to separate so that Clark can complete his destiny.

I think you really captured their characters ... I could see this scenario playing out in my head.

I only saw a few mistakes, like “I didn’t realise it bothered you so much.” Clark said quietly. . It should be a comma before the second quotes. You seemed to be doing that in the beginning, just seemed to shift to the periods at the end. And I don't think Ollie would use the word "mum" either ... it's most probably be "mom" or "mother".

Other than that, it was great! I really enjoyed it and I'm so glad you're going to make this into a series cuz I would love to see more Clark/Oliver from you!

Do you mind me adding this to my Clark/Ollie fic list?

[calcus]

Thank you! I was very nervous about posting it. :) It's one of the interesting things about the training that Clark undergoes, which is that he needs to be separated from his life to learn to use his powers properly and to know more about his people.

I wasn't certain about the voices, so thanks for that. It was hard and writing Smallville for the first time is a little frustrating, lol.

Thanks for pointing those things out. Figures that I would catch the 'mom/mum' with Clark and not with Ollie. I'm not used to writing in American English.

I have this tendency to turn most of what I write into series, it's kind of fun, kind of frustrating.

For sure, add away. :)

[carolandtom]

This was a great read. I hope Martha doesn't act like Oliver's mother when Clark is gone (that always bothers me in fics) but the Clark/Oliver relationship here seems mature and very well handled. Looking forward to more!

[calcus]

Thanks. :) I think Martha is maternal by nature but Oliver has a mother, she may be dead but she's still his mother and he is an adult. He's an interesting young man and she's fairly certain that Oliver is her sons boyfriend so she wants to keep in touch with him. Also, he's a major contributor and she's a politician these days! Hopefully it won't be too long 'til I finish the next part.

[anndaydream]

Awww... schmoopy mush... that was really sweet... well done...

[calcus]

Thanks. I was going for fluff originally but then it got a little sad so I'm glad it was still sweet. :)

[eternal_moonie]

This is such an awesome start!!!

[calcus]

Thanks! :)

[prophet144]

I really like this and can't wait to read more in this series.

I did catch a could of mistakes.

“The one time I did, you seemed all defensive. Like right now instance.” Oliver said, tilting his head and raising his eyebrows ironically. --there should be a 'for' between now & instance.

The other is spelling: mould should be mold

[calcus]

Thank you so much for both of those, those sort of things are hard to catch when you wrote it yourself. Also thank you for commenting! :)